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I write with reference to the article which has been published by your travel magazine in last week. I would like to get your attention for the incorrect detail on the magazine which was not relevant to my city of Colombo in Sri Lanka. Please note that the information about the population in the city should be corrected as five millions instated of one million. Nevertheless, I believe that, the travel magazine should always carry the correct details, if not, readers may be get misleads about the content which shows the different picture to international visitors who are planning to visit my hometown. And this will be heavily effected to the tourism industry to my city, hence, my hometown is tourism based location. Therefore, I would like to suggest that, all information should be double check and validated by editor of the magazine prior to the publication. In this incident, I am very much appreciate, if you could make an immediate arrangement to correct the content of the city and publish on your next week magazine with the heading of “Population correction in the Colombo city of Sri Lanka”. I hope you understand the value of publishing the correct details.
I write with reference to the article which has
been published
by your travel
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magazine
in last week. I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
your attention for the incorrect detail on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
magazine
which was not relevant to my city of Colombo in Sri Lanka.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
note that the information about the population in the city should
be corrected
as five millions instated of one million.

Nevertheless
, I believe that, the travel
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
magazine
should always carry the correct
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
, if not, readers may be
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get
misleads about the content which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
picture to international visitors who are planning to visit my hometown. And this will be
heavily
effected to the tourism industry to my city,
hence
, my hometown is tourism based location.

Therefore
, I would like to suggest that, all information should be double
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
and validated by editor of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
magazine
prior to the publication. In this incident, I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much appreciate, if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
an immediate arrangement to correct the content of the city and publish on your
next
week
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
magazine
with the heading of “Population correction in the Colombo city of Sri Lanka”.

I hope you understand the value of publishing the correct
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
.
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IELTS essay you have just read an article in an international

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
200 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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