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You have been learning Online for two years so you have not been doing a field trip for that long. Meanwhile, you heard such an experience from your seniors when you were still in Junior High. You already heard you can go back to school in a few months. As a result, you decide to write a proposal to your homeroom teacher suggesting where you could go to learn cultures in suburban areas. Include interesting or important aspects of the culture you recommend to visit.

You have been learning Online for two years so you have not been doing a field trip for that long. Meanwhile, you heard such an experience from your seniors when you were still in Junior High. You already heard you can go back to school in a few months. As a result, you decide to write a proposal to your homeroom teacher suggesting where you could go to learn cultures in suburban areas. Include interesting or important aspects of the culture you recommend to visit. N8ab0
In the past 2 years, the Coronavirus pandemic has led the school to cancel all field trips that students have heard stories about and have been looking forward to since junior high school. Taking into consideration that in a few months we will be going back to school, I am writing this proposal to give suggestions regarding field trip destinations to learn cultures. Kampung Naga Kampung Naga is a sundanese traditional village located in West Java which has become one of my recommendations because in addition to its pristine nature, the ancestral traditions and culture is very interesting to explore. There are also many monuments and artistic activities that we can do here. Besides that, the location of this village is not too far so the cost will be affordable. Desa Wae Rebo Desa Wae Rebo is a Minangnese village located in East Nusa Tenggara which is definitely a top pick because of its natural beauty. Adding to that, this village is known for its cultural richness which can be very informative to all students. Besides that, this village has great food, and plenty of traditional art which we can explore. However, putting into mind the budget constraint of this trip, the amount of students, and the far distance of this destination, I would suggest sticking to closer destinations. After some consideration, I am confident that Kampung Naga is the best pick for the field trip. I would therefore recommend that we pick this destination for the upcoming field trip in the next few months.
In the past 2 years, the Coronavirus pandemic has led the school to cancel all
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field
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trips
that students have heard stories about and have been looking forward to since junior high school. Taking into consideration that in a few months we will be going back to school, I am writing this proposal to give suggestions regarding
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field
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trip
destinations to learn cultures.

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Kampung Naga Kampung Naga
is a
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sundanese
traditional
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village
located in West Java which has become one of my recommendations
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because
in addition
to its pristine nature, the ancestral traditions and culture is
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very
interesting to explore. There are
also
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many
monuments and artistic activities that we can do here.
Besides
that, the location of this
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village
is not too far
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so
the cost will be affordable.

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Desa
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Wae
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Rebo


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Desa
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Wae
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Rebo
is a
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Minangnese
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village
located in East
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Nusa
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Tenggara
which is definitely a top pick
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because
of its natural beauty. Adding to that, this
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village
is known
for its cultural richness which can be
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very
informative to all students.
Besides
that, this
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village
has great food, and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of traditional art which we can explore.
However
, putting into mind the budget constraint of this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
, the amount of students, and the far distance of this destination, I would suggest sticking to closer destinations.

After
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some
consideration, I am confident that
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Kampung
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Naga
is the best pick for the
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field
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trip
. I would
therefore
recommend that we pick this destination for the upcoming
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field
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trip
in the
next
few months.
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IELTS essay You have been learning Online for two years so you have not been doing a field trip for that long. Meanwhile, you heard such an experience from your seniors when you were still in Junior High. You already heard you can go back to school in a few months. As a result, you decide to write a proposal to your homeroom teacher suggesting where you could go to learn cultures in suburban areas. Include interesting or important aspects of the culture you recommend to visit.

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255 words
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