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You have a big amount of money. What are you going to do with it? Why?

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If I have a big amount of money, I will start my own business. My dream is to open a coffee shop even though it's not easy. I have had a lot of idea about it since i was in high school. I plan to open a restaurant as soon as I graduate and have enough money. this is also an opportunity to take a big pile of money and turning it into a bigger pile of money. As a result, I am able to fulfill my dream and earn an additional income.
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IELTS essay You have a big amount of money. What are you going to do with it? Why?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
93 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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