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1. Which of these situations would you find the most irritating when travelling by bus in Hanoi? Why? How would you deal with it?

1. Which of these situations would you find the most irritating when travelling by bus in Hanoi? Why? How would you deal with it? PrYkd

The bus is overcrowded make me the most irritating because i feel suffocated and nauseous while travelling in over crowded buses. Sometime it is so unbearable that I have to get down from the bus. It is difficult to move even to take out money from the pocket to buy the ticket. Morever, there is a high risk of theft, especially pickpockets. Travelling in an overcrowded bus is a terrible experience, especially if you have to do it every day. Therefore, I limit going out during peak hours. If it's really necessary, I will walk or motorbike.

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IELTS essay 1. Which of these situations would you find the most irritating when travelling by bus in Hanoi? Why? How would you deal with it?

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