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Do you agree or disagree with the following statment? In the twenty years there will be fewer cars in the use than there are today. Use spesifik reason and example to support your answer. v.2

with the following statment? In the twenty years there will be fewer cars in the use than there are today. Use spesifik reason and example to support your answer. v. 2
us" style=" font-family: " Times New Roman" , serif" > In recent decades, we have witnessed a rapid growth of the number of domestic cars with the help of the development of modern technologies. The arguments collides in the topic that whether cars in use will decline in twenty years. From my perspective, we will witness a drop in cars in use. us" style=" font-family: " Times New Roman" , serif" > First of all, governments are building and planning new underground and bus lines every year. Everyone, as an ordinary citizen, can see the development of the cities' means of transports. that is to say, it has become much more convenient and commodious or us to get around. I am saying without any exaggeration that we can go any where we want in the city just by the public transports. Besides, it is also much cheaper by using transports than driving cars. If we want to drive, we have to pay at least the gasoline and the fee of parking lots. Since only the fee of parking lots equals to the expense of taking transports, it will cost a lot by driving. To summarize, the decrease of chances that people will use cars lead to the decline of cars in use. us" style=" font-family: " Times New Roman" , serif" > In addition, with the appeal of environmental protection, citizens will become unwilling to use cars for the purpose of protecting environments. The exhaust released by cars every year is a major source of greenhouse gas. it is known to all that greenhouse gas has huge and negative effects on the earth, especially its temperature. Moreover, there are many substitutes of cars like public means of transports that I mentioned before and walking which is a way of exercise. there is also evidence show that the amount of people who buy cars is declining these years. So, it can be foreseen that the number of cars on the road will not increase in a few years and then it will decline. us" style=" font-family: " Times New Roman" , serif" > In a nutshell, the decrease of chances that people will use cars and the number of g who buy cars serve to the decline of cars in use.
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; In recent decades, we have witnessed a rapid growth of the number of domestic
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cars
with the
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help
of the development of modern technologies. The arguments
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collides
in the topic that whether
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cars
in
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use
will decline in twenty years. From my perspective, we will witness a drop in
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cars
in
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use
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,
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governments
are building and planning
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new
underground and bus lines every
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year
. Everyone, as an ordinary citizen, can
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see
the development of the
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transports
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that
is to say, it has become much more convenient and commodious or us to
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get
around. I am saying without any exaggeration that we can go
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any where
we want in the city
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just
by the public
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transports
.
Besides
, it is
also
much cheaper by using
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transports
than driving
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cars
. If we want to drive, we
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have to
pay at least the gasoline and the fee of parking lots. Since
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only
the fee of parking lots equals to the expense of taking
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transports
, it will cost a lot by driving.
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, the decrease of chances that
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people
will
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use
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cars
lead to the decline of
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cars
in
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use
.

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In addition
, with the appeal of environmental protection, citizens will become unwilling to
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use
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cars
for the purpose of protecting environments. The exhaust released by
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cars
every
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year
is a major source of greenhouse gas.
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it
is known
to all that greenhouse gas has huge and
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negative
effects on the earth,
especially
its temperature.
Moreover
, there are
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many
substitutes of
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cars
like public means of
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transports
that I mentioned
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before
and walking which is a way of exercise.
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there
is
also
evidence
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show
that the amount of
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people
who
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buy
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cars
is declining these years.
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So
, it can be foreseen that the number of
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cars
on the road will not increase in a few years and then it will decline.

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people
will
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use
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cars
and the number of g who
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buy
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cars
serve to the decline of
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cars
in
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use
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
35Mistakes

IELTS essay with the following statment? In the twenty years there will be fewer cars in the use than there are today. Use spesifik reason and example to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
380 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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