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you are planning to take your children to a movie this weeken. there are 3 kind of movie to wacth ; action , science fiction, cartoon. which one do you think í the best for your children.

you are planning to take your children to a movie this weeken. there are 3 kind of movie to wacth; action, science fiction, cartoon. which one do you think í the best for your children. W8GBq
The action films have action series that attracted viewers so much. And science fictions are the kind of film that usually turns to the future and most people love it. For my Children, I think that cartoon film may be the most suitable for them. Cartoon firmly is the top choice of almost parent for your kids. This kind of this film is not only accepted by parents but it's also received loving of children, instead of others. They often catch-eyes for children by the images with a lot of colorful and vivid that many children can watch almost time if they can, and my son is one of them. Whenever watching the cartoon, they usually feel happier and laugh more than when they watch others. An action or science fiction usually brings out adults the exciting but it doesn't pay attention with lite boys or girls. Besides that, through situations or stories from cartoons, it often brings out education for children that can teach children good lessons, the right things, and also the things they need to avoid. For parents, they always want their children to develop well mentally through cartoons instead of movies with violent content and images that are not suitable for their age and affect their mind a lot. In addition, according to surveys from many families, children prefer to watch cartoons over other such as action movies or science fiction. In conclusion, depending on positve things, cartoons are the most suitable for children and I firmly believe that it the best choice for most children.
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series that attracted viewers
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much. And science fictions are the kind of film that
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turns to the future and most
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film may be the most suitable for them.

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received loving of
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,
instead
of others. They
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catch-eyes for
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children
by the images with
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colorful and vivid that
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children
can
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almost time if they can, and my son is one of them. Whenever watching the
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cartoon
, they
usually
feel happier and laugh more than when they
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watch
others. An
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action
or science fiction
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brings out adults the exciting
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lessons, the right things, and
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the things they need to avoid. For parents, they always want their
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children
to develop well mentally through
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cartoons
instead
of movies with violent content and images that are not suitable for their age and affect their mind a lot.
In addition
, according to surveys from
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many
families,
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children
prefer to
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cartoons
over other such as
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action
movies or science fiction.

In conclusion
, depending on
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things,
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cartoons
are the most suitable for
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children
and I
firmly
believe that
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the best choice for most
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IELTS essay you are planning to take your children to a movie this weeken. there are 3 kind of movie to wacth; action, science fiction, cartoon. which one do you think í the best for your children.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
260 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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