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You are going to set up your own food and catering business. What are you preparing now

You are going to set up your own food and catering business. What are you preparing now rbYAN
To start a food and catering business, I will need to prepare the following: The first step is to choose a business model, high-end or mid-range, Vietnamese or foreign dishes, . . The second is capital mobilization, capital is a prerequisite for doing business. First of all, I need to determine the amount of capital I have and the source of capital that can be mobilized, if not enough I will have to borrow. Third is Identify target customers. My restaurant cannot serve all customers at once. Therefore, identifying target customers is essential. Fourth is Business Planning. Every business needs a specific plan. A detailed plan will help me stay on track and limit my risk. The fifth is Find a business location and recruit personnel And finally, Register for a business license
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start
a food and catering
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business
, I will need to prepare the following:

The
first
step is to choose a
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business
model, high-
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end
or mid-range, Vietnamese or foreign dishes
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The second is
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mobilization,
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capital
is a prerequisite for doing
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business
.
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First of all
, I need to determine the amount of
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capital
I have and the source of
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capital
that can
be mobilized
, if not
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enough
I will
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have to
borrow.

Third is
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Identify
target customers. My restaurant cannot serve all customers at once.
Therefore
, identifying target customers is essential.

Fourth is
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Business
Planning. Every
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business
needs a specific plan. A detailed plan will
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help
me stay on
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track
and limit my
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risk
.

The fifth is Find a
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business
location and recruit personnel

And
finally
, Register for a
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license
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IELTS essay You are going to set up your own food and catering business. What are you preparing now

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
132 words
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