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Many students decide to further their study abroad. What are the benefits and drawbacks of studying abroad? What is your view on this? What do you prefer? v.2

Many students decide to further their study abroad. What are the benefits and drawbacks of studying abroad? What is your view on this? What do you prefer? v. 2
Reading and writing are one of the primary capability that a knowledgeable man should posses for him to be recognised in society. Some people argue that children do not need to be capable of writing by hand as modern technology allows them to achieve it in different ways. I think handwriting is one of a mandatory skill that a child should acquire, hence should be taught well. Undoubtedly, modern technology provides different ways of writing letters and essays rather than achieving it by handwriting. One of the main popular methods is type using a computer keyboard on a word processor which consists of many features such as spell correction and synonym suggestions. Typing allows children to delete, without a hassle and assists them to develop tidy documents. Nevertheless, handwriting is a skill which connects the hand and brain, allowing the child to memorise the content quickly. It is a known fact that, while studying the people who used to write short notes are far more capable of remembering the subject matter. A child who learns handwriting will have excellent fine motor skills as they need to concentrate on letters which they write. Furthermore, handwriting, provides a sense of correct spelling and grammatical range, assisting the child to learn the language without a great effort. The skill of building complex sentences with grammatical accuracy is one of a skill which builds with handwriting. The touch typing or using a keyboard a child will not be able to develop their creativity as the word processor always suggest the sentences. In conclusion, I firmly believe that children should be taught handwriting. This will allow them to bring up and shine their language skills.
Reading and writing are one of the primary capability that a knowledgeable
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man
should posses for him to be
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recognised
in society.
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Some
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people
argue that children do not need to be capable of writing by hand as modern technology
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allows
them to achieve it in
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different
ways. I
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think
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handwriting
is one of a mandatory
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skill
that a
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child
should acquire,
hence
should
be taught
well.

Undoubtedly
, modern technology provides
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different
ways of writing letters and essays
rather
than achieving it by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
handwriting
. One of the main popular methods is type using a computer keyboard on a word processor which consists of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
features such as spell correction and synonym suggestions. Typing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
children to delete, without a hassle and assists them to develop tidy documents.

Nevertheless
,
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handwriting
is a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skill
which connects the hand and brain, allowing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
child
to
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memorise
the content
quickly
. It is a known fact that, while studying the
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people
who
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used
to write short notes are far more capable of remembering the
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subject matter
. A
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child
who learns
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handwriting
will have excellent fine motor
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skills
as they need to concentrate on letters which they write.

Furthermore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
handwriting
, provides a sense of correct spelling and grammatical range, assisting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
child
to learn the language without a great effort. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skill
of building complex sentences with grammatical accuracy is one of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skill
which builds with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
handwriting
. The touch typing or using a keyboard a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
child
will not be able to develop their creativity as the word processor always suggest the sentences.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that children should
be taught
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
handwriting
. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
them to bring up and shine their language
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Language comes first. It’s not that language grows out of consciousness, if you haven’t got language, you can’t be conscious.
Alan Moore

IELTS essay Many students decide to further their study abroad. What are the benefits and drawbacks of studying abroad? What is your view on this? What do you prefer? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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