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Write your profile for the Student Status website. Write about these things. (100–150 words) • your personal details • your job / studies • your interests

Write your profile for the Student Status website. Write about these things. (100–150 words) • your personal details • your job / studies • your interests 6mdMB
I'm Yoon Shwe Hlwar Soe. Most of people call me Yoon Yoon. My English name is Curly. You can call me as you like. I'm 18 and I'm a student. I'm waiting to University. I'm from Yangon. I live with my family. I have one elder brother. He's 23. He works from home. I'm single. I'm not slim but not overweight. I'm shot girl. I got sweet smile. I have brown curly hair. I'm quite person but I'm with my friends I'm so talkative. I'm kind and patient. I'm hardworking but sometimes I'm lazy. I like listening to music and watching. I can watch Korean Series the whole day. I like Kpop music. BTS is my favorite Korean Boy Band. I really love their songs and performance. They make me happy. When I feel sad, I listen to their songs. I also like watching cartoon movies. And then, I like gardening. I really love flowers. Goals of my life is I want to be a good daughter to my parents. That's all.
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Yoon Yoon
. My English name is Curly. You can call me as you like. I'm 18 and I'm a student. I'm waiting to University.
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'm shot girl.
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'm quite person
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'm kind and patient.
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'm hardworking
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like listening to music and watching.
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Korean Series the whole day.
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really
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their songs and performance. They
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daughter to my parents. That's all.
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IELTS essay Write your profile for the Student Status website. Write about these things. (100–150 words) • your personal details • your job / studies • your interests

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
172 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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