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write causes and how we discourage people from this habit :about people buy clothes and use them a short time then throw them away.

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In recent years, many people tend to buy new clothes to prepare for a special occasion or use them for a short time and then throw them away. This essay will examine the major causes and something to discourage people from this habit. To begin with, chasing trends to satisfy a temporary need. People want to stand out and feel more confident when they wear new clothes. Therefore, they do not think about long-term use goals. As a result, they have no control over their behavior, infatuation with beauty leads to more buying and irrational spending. We discourage people from this habit because it's a waste. Such spending will form bad spending habits. In conclusion, they want to catch up with trends and like beauty so they buy a lot and only use them for a short time. They should make a plan about their spending and have to hold back.
In recent years,
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people
tend to
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buy
new clothes to prepare for a special occasion or
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use
them for a short time and then throw them away. This essay will examine the major causes and something to discourage
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people
from this habit.

To
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begin
with, chasing trends to satisfy a temporary need.
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People
want to stand out and feel more confident when they wear new clothes.
Therefore
, they do not
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think
about long-term
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use
goals.
As a result
, they have no control over their behavior, infatuation with beauty leads to more buying and irrational spending.

We discourage
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people
from this habit
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because
it's a waste. Such spending will form
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bad
spending habits.

In conclusion
, they want to catch up with trends and like beauty
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so
they
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buy
a lot and
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only
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use
them for a short time. They should
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make
a plan about their spending and
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have to
hold back.

IELTS essay write causes and how we discourage people from this habit: about people buy clothes and use them a short time then throw them away.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
151 words
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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