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On the one hand, there are a couple of advantages to reading newspapers. First, newspapers are a trustworthy source of information. For example, newspapers are written by journalists and they are responsible for accuracy of information before publishing it to the readers. In addition, newspapers are suitable for old people. For example, senior citizens have a habit read a newspaper in the early morning and most of them are technology-illiterate so they can’t read current affairs on the internet like young people. On the other hand, it is important to point out the benefits of the internet. First, reading news online is comfortable and easy to access. For example, people who use smartphones can access and receive new information fast and updated up to the minute. Furthermore, the internet is more environmentally-friendly. For instance, making newspapers need to cut trees for paper pulp but using the internet just needs a phone.
On the one hand, there are a couple of advantages to reading
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are a trustworthy source of information.
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are written
by
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journalists and
they are responsible for accuracy of information
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before
publishing it to the readers.
In addition
,
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newspapers
are suitable for
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old
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people
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, senior citizens have a habit read a
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in the early morning and most of them are technology-illiterate
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they can’t read
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current
affairs on the internet like young
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people
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, it is
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important
to point out the benefits of the internet.
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, reading news online is comfortable and easy to access.
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,
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people
who
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use
smartphones can access and receive new information
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fast
and updated
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up to the minute
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Furthermore
, the internet is more
environmentally
-friendly.
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, making
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need to
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cut
trees for paper pulp
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using the internet
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IELTS essay using newspaper or internet

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
151 words
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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