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write an essay of about words describing a loved one.

write an essay of about words describing a loved one. 95Y2j
My family have four people: my father, my mother, my young sister and me. Today, I will write about my father. He is 50 years old. He is a Worker. My father tall about 1m65, and he is medium built. He has dark skin. His hair is short black. He has oval face. He has straight nose. His eyes is big. He has a mustache. His forehead is wide and high. His eyebrows are black and bushy, so my eyebrows are too. My father's hand big and rough because he does a lot of work. He loves us very much. He is hard working. In the life, he is easy - going and funny. He likes help every people. He can do fix electrical. He usually get up at 6: 00 am and wake us up at 6: 30 am. In the afternoon, he runs around stadium. I loves my father very much.
My family have four
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people
: my
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father
, my mother, my young sister and me.
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Today
, I will write about my
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father
. He is 50 years
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. He is a Worker. My
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father
tall about 1m65, and he is medium built. He has dark skin. His hair is short black. He has oval face. He has straight
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nose
. His eyes
You should probably use: "are".
is
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big
. He has a mustache. His forehead is wide and high. His eyebrows are black and bushy,
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so
my eyebrows are too. My father's hand
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big
and rough
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because
he does
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a lot of
work. He
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loves
us
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very
much. He is
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
hard working
. In the life, he is easy
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-
going and
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funny
. He likes
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help
every
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people
. He can do
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fix
electrical.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
He
usually
The pronoun 'He' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "gets", "got".
get
up at 6: 00 am and wake us up at 6: 30 am. In the afternoon, he runs around stadium. I
The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: "love"
loves
my
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father
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very
much.

IELTS essay write an essay of about words describing a loved one.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
153 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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