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Many people believe that that life in urban areas are suprerior and beneficial than rural areas. To what extent do you agree

Many people believe that that life in urban areas are suprerior and beneficial than rural areas. To what extent do you agree OMEJd
In this day and age, majority of masses insist that metropolitan areas are better than life in the villages. I completely agree with the above notion as there are various reason behind it. This essay will discuss my viewpoint and example. To commence with, there are numerous benefits behind this migration. The main reason is education system. in present time, there are least government schools in rural areas, which people are not comfortable with it and confront lots of adversities. Since all the college and universities are located in urban areas which provide better education for their better future. Thus, they shift to developed cities to attain education. Secondly, number of individuals are suffering from ailments. Hence, in cities there are wide range of medical amenities which are not only useful to diagnose ailments but also provide superior treatment as a result, they prefer urban areas. To illustrate, a survey conducted on people relocation, 60percent of the younger generation prefer the cities for quality of education and medical facilities. Thus, the population in cities is increasing rapidly. Moreover, employment is big issue in rural areas because of inadequate jobs people also face difficulties for thier survival which they prefer cities for work. Even though, some individuals are not educated, there are number of multinational companies, which not only bestow jobs but also provide amenities to them for there better future like, medical policy, good education for their children. Additionally in cities people are well known to the current affairs in county. For example, the report published by hindustan time revealed that in delhi employment rate is 80 percent. Consequently, masses enjoy their life with this facilities.
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majority of
masses insist that metropolitan
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are
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better
than life in the villages. I completely
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agree
with the above notion as there are various reason behind it. This essay will discuss my viewpoint and example.

To commence with, there are numerous benefits behind this migration. The main reason is
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education
system.
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in
present time, there are
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least
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government
schools in rural
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areas
, which
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people
are not comfortable with it and confront lots of adversities. Since all the college and universities
are located
in urban
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areas
which provide
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better
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education
for their
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better
future.
Thus
, they shift to developed
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cities
to attain
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education
.
Secondly
, number of individuals are suffering from ailments.
Hence
, in
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cities
there are wide range of medical amenities which are not
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only
useful to diagnose ailments
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but
also
provide superior treatment
as a result
, they prefer urban
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areas
. To illustrate, a survey conducted on
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people
relocation, 60percent of the younger generation prefer the
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cities
for quality of
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education
and medical facilities.
Thus
, the population in
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cities
is increasing
rapidly
.

Moreover
, employment is
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big
issue in rural
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areas
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because
of inadequate jobs
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people
also
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survival which they prefer
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cities
for work.
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,
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some
individuals are not educated, there are number of multinational
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companies
, which not
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only
bestow jobs
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but
also
provide amenities to them for there
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better
future like, medical policy,
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good
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education
for their children.
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Additionally
in
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cities
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people
are well known to the
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current
affairs in county.
For example
, the report published by
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hindustan
time revealed that in
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delhi
employment rate is 80 percent.
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, masses enjoy their life with
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IELTS essay Many people believe that that life in urban areas are suprerior and beneficial than rural areas. To what extent do you agree

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