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Serial drama on tv ( for example soap opera or soaps) plays an important social role. Do you agree or disagree.

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It is indeed true that, television is e piece of electrical equipment in the shape of a box, it has a glass screen which shows programmes with moving pictures and sounds. In this context, popular startum of the society tends to believe that, drama shows are extremely necessary for society. However, I enderse the statement to little extent, I have some solid grounds to defend my opinion which I would like to explicate it at length in the paragraphs to come. To initiate with, there are abundant beneficial points to support this argument. Firstly, one of the biggest benefit is learning about new cultures. For instance, while watching the serials, individuals can learn distinct types of language style, culture, religion or traditional lifestyle of other nation. Secondly, in today's era the television channels gain extremely high worth from drama serials. Owing to this, the employment rate is increasing day by day and the economy of nation is also increase. Finally, drama channels are good source of entertainment or time pass for individuals. However, the opposite group of people deems that, instead of drama serials, pupils must spend their spare time to watch national geographical channel, due to the fact of that, they can gain crucial information of wildlife animals and birds. Moreover, individuals must watch reality shows like singing or dance competition also like masterchef. According to survey, TV channels gain high income through the reality shows. Furthermore, news channels are also crucial for every age groups. If adults can start to watch news program, their intellectual ability or processing memory is increased. Lastly, now pupils take ample amount of stress to obtain good marks. In that case, children should watch the cartoons programme for better relaxation. In a nutshell, I pen down saying that, in the current scenario, television is a part of our family member. This invention change the lifestyle of humans. According to my perception, instead of reading newspaper, masses can watch the television, due to the fact they can gain the full knowledge with entertainment way.
It is
indeed
true that,
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television
is e piece of electrical equipment in the shape of a box, it has a glass screen which
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shows
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programmes
with moving pictures and sounds. In this context, popular
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startum
of the society tends to believe that,
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drama
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shows
are
extremely
necessary for society.
However
, I
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enderse
the statement to
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little
extent, I have
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some
solid grounds to defend my opinion which I would like to explicate it at length in the paragraphs to
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come
.

To initiate with, there are abundant beneficial points to support this argument.
Firstly
, one of the biggest benefit is learning about new cultures.
For instance
, while watching the serials, individuals can learn distinct types of language style, culture, religion or traditional lifestyle of other nation.
Secondly
, in
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today
's era the
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television
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channels
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gain
extremely
high worth from
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drama
serials. Owing to this, the employment rate is increasing day by day and the economy of nation is
also
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increase
.
Finally
,
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drama
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channels
are
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good
source of entertainment or time pass for individuals.

However
, the opposite group of
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people
deems that,
instead
of
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drama
serials, pupils
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must
spend their spare time to
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watch
national geographical
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channel
, due to the fact of that, they can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gain
crucial information of wildlife animals and birds.
Moreover
, individuals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
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watch
reality
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shows
like singing or dance competition
also
like
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masterchef
. According to survey, TV
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channels
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gain
high income through the reality
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shows
.
Furthermore
, news
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channels
are
also
crucial for every age groups. If adults can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to
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watch
news program, their intellectual ability or processing memory
is increased
.
Lastly
,
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now
pupils take ample amount of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
to obtain
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
marks.
In that case
, children should
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watch
the cartoons
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programme
for better relaxation.

In a nutshell, I pen down saying that, in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
scenario,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
television
is a part of our family member. This invention
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change
the lifestyle of humans. According to my perception,
instead
of reading newspaper, masses can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
watch
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
television
, due to the fact they can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gain
the full knowledge with entertainment way.
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IELTS essay Serial drama on tv ( for example soap opera or soaps) plays an important social role.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
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