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. Write an essay of 350 words on the following topic: "The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds." Present your perspective on this issue, using relevant reasons and examples to support your views

. Write an essay of 350 words on the following topic: "The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds. " Present your perspective on this issue, using relevant reasons and examples to support your views d56Oo
This statement actually consists of a series of three related claims: (1) machines are tools of human minds; (2) human minds will always be superior to machines; and (3) it is because machines are human tools that human minds will always be superior to machines. While I concede the first claim, whether I agree with the other two claims depends partly on how one defines "superiority, " and partly on how willing one is to humble oneself to the unknown future scenarios. The statement is clearly accurate insofar as machines are tools of human minds. After all, would any machine even exist unless a human being invented it? Of course not. Moreover, I would be hard-pressed to think of any machine that cannot be described as a tool. Even machines designed to entertain or amuse us--for example, toy robots, cars and video games, and novelty items--are in fact tools, which their inventors and promoters use for engaging in commerce and the business of entertainment and amusement. And, the claim that a machine can be an end in itself, without purpose or utilitarian function for humans whatsoever, is dubious at best, since I cannot conjure up even a single example of any such machine. Thus when we develop any sort of machine we always have some sort of end in mind a purpose for that machine. As for the statement's second claim, in certain respects machines are superior. We have devised machines that perform number-crunching and other rote cerebral tasks with greater accuracy and speed than human minds ever could. In fact, it is because we can devise machines that are superior in these respects that we devise them--as our tools--to begin with. However, if one defines superiority not in terms of competence in per-forming rote tasks but rather in other ways, human minds are superior. Machines have no capacity for independent thought, for making judgments based on normative considerations, or for developing emotional responses to intellectual problems. Up until now, the notion of human-made machines that develop the ability to think on their own, and to develop so-called "emotional intelligence, " has been pure fiction. Besides, even in fiction we humans ultimately prevail over such machines--as in the cases of Frankenstein's monster and Hal, the computer in 2001: A Space Odyssey. Yet it seems presumptuous to assert with confidence that humans will always maintain their superior status over their machines. Recent advances in biotechnology, particularly in the area of human genome research, suggest that within the 21st Century we'll witness machines that can learn to think on their own, to repair and nurture themselves, to experience visceral sensations, and so forth. In other words, machines will soon exhibit the traits to which we humans attribute our own superiority. In sum, because we devise machines in order that they may serve us, it is fair to characterize machines as "tools of human minds. " And insofar as humans have the unique capacity for independent thought, subjective judgment, and emotional response, it also seems fair to claim superiority over our machines. Besides, should we ever become so clever a species as to devise machines that can truly think for themselves and look out for their own well-being, then query whether these machines of the future would be "machines'' anymore.
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machines
are
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tools
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minds; (2)
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human
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minds
will always be
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superior
to
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machines
; and (3) it is
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because
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machines
are human

tools that
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human
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minds
will always be
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superior
to
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machines
. While I concede the
first
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claim
, whether I

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agree
with the
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claims
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superiority,
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and partly on how

willing one is to humble oneself to the unknown future scenarios.

The statement is
clearly
accurate insofar as
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machines
are
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tools
of
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human
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minds
.
After all
, would any

machine even exist unless a
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human
being invented
it?
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not.
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, I would be
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hard
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to
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think
of any
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machine
that cannot be
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described
as a
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tool
. Even
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machines
designed to entertain or

amuse us--
for example
, toy robots, cars and video games, and novelty items--are in fact
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tools
, which

their inventors and promoters
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use
for engaging in commerce and the business of entertainment and

amusement. And, the
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claim
that a
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machine
can be an
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end
in itself, without purpose or utilitarian function

for
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humans
whatsoever, is dubious at best, since I cannot conjure up even a single example of any such

machine.
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Thus
when we develop any sort of
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machine
we always have
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some
sort of
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end
in
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mind
a

purpose for that machine.

As for the statement's second
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claim
, in certain respects
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machines
are
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superior
. We have devised

machines that perform number-crunching and
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other
rote cerebral tasks with greater accuracy and speed

than
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human
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minds
ever could. In fact, it is
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because
we can
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devise
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machines
that are
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superior
in these

respects that we
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devise
them--as our tools--to
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begin
with.
However
, if one defines superiority not in

terms of competence in per-forming rote tasks
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but
rather
in
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other
ways,
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human
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minds
are superior.

Machines have no capacity for independent
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thought
, for making judgments based on normative

considerations, or for developing emotional responses to intellectual problems.

Up until
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now
, the notion of human-made
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machines
that develop the ability to
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think
on their
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own
, and to

develop
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so
-called
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emotional intelligence,
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has been pure fiction.
Besides
, even in fiction we humans

ultimately
prevail over such machines--as in the cases of Frankenstein's monster and Hal, the computer

in 2001: A Space Odyssey.
Yet
it seems presumptuous to assert with confidence that
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humans
will

always maintain their
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superior
status over their
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machines
. Recent advances in biotechnology,

particularly
in the area of
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human
genome research, suggest that within the 21st Century we'll witness

machines that can learn to
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think
on their
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own
, to repair and nurture themselves, to experience visceral

sensations, and
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so
forth. In
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other
words,
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machines
will
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soon
exhibit the traits to which we humans

attribute our
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own
superiority.

In sum,
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because
we
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devise
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machines
in order that they may serve us, it is
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fair
to characterize machines

as
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tools of
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human
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minds
.
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And insofar as
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humans
have the unique capacity for independent
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thought
,

subjective judgment, and emotional response, it
also
seems
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fair
to
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claim
superiority over our machines.

Besides
, should we ever become
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so
clever a species as to
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devise
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machines
that can
truly
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think
for

themselves and look out for their
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own
well-being, then query whether these
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machines
of the future

would be
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machines'' anymore.
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IELTS essay . Write an essay of 350 words on the following topic: "The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds. " Present your perspective on this issue, using relevant reasons and examples to support your views

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
547 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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