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Write an analysis essay about a particular public place and suggest ways to make it more appealing.

Write an analysis essay about a particular public place and suggest ways to make it more appealing. PRq3w
Cay Sop park is a public place that provides many recreational opportunities in Dong Hung Thuan ward. The park is a popular space for residents in their spare time for relaxation, exercise, or work-related purposes. However, it is attractive for children and young people. One of the reasons the park is not attractive to the old is because there are not enough amenities or programming designed for their specific interests or needs. There are many ways in which the city park could be made more appealing and interesting. Firstly, reconstructing territory by adding walking paths and trails because the elderly who visit parks most often use walking paths or trails. When adding walking paths, natural shade, or using manufactured shade structures to make the paths more comfortable. In addition, we should set signs or mile markers so walkers can track their progress or natural playgrounds along the path. On the other hand, the developer park should plant many trees around the park. Trees are an integral part of any natural landscape as they provide shade during hot summer days, and protect less polluted air for everyone. Secondly, creating an attractive place that appeals to the young to the old. The developer park should add chess or checkerboard tables near the playground so that the old or parents could be easy look at their children as well as socialize with one another while children and grandchildren play nearby. Besides, when people finish their assignments at the office, they need entertainment to gain power for the next day. One suggestion is the installation of food stalls or even live music. People can go to the theatre or music concern to relax, but it is not comfortable as a park due to the required quiet place. Moreover, some entertainment places do not let sightseers or audiences bring food or drinks. Hence, if the city park has food stalls and live music, it is the best choice for people to come here for entertainment. In conclusion, Cay Sop park is extremely essential for locals in Dong Hung Thuan ward. We should conserve the park to avoid damage because it is a public place that people can entertain jointly as well as socialize.
Cay Sop
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park
is a public
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place
that provides
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many
recreational opportunities in Dong Hung
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Thuan
ward. The
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park
is a popular space for residents in their spare time for relaxation, exercise, or work-related purposes.
However
, it is attractive for children and young
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people
. One of the reasons the
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park
is not attractive to the
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old
is
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because
there are not
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enough
amenities or programming designed for their specific interests or needs. There are
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many
ways in which the city
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park
could
be made
more appealing and interesting.

Firstly
, reconstructing territory by adding walking
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paths
and trails
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because
the elderly who visit
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parks
most
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often
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use
walking
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paths
or trails. When adding walking
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paths
, natural shade, or using manufactured shade structures to
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make
the
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paths
more comfortable.
In addition
, we should set signs or mile markers
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so
walkers can
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track
their progress or natural playgrounds along the
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path
.
On the other hand
, the developer
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park
should plant
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many
trees around the
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park
. Trees are an integral part of any natural landscape as they provide shade during hot summer days, and protect less polluted air for everyone.

Secondly
, creating an attractive
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place
that appeals to the young to the
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old
. The developer
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park
should
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add
chess or checkerboard tables near the playground
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so
that the
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old
or parents could be easy look at their children
as well
as socialize with one another while children and grandchildren play nearby.
Besides
, when
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people
finish their assignments at the office, they need entertainment to gain power for the
next
day. One suggestion is the installation of food stalls or even
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
music.
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People
can go to the
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theatre
or music concern to relax,
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but
it is not comfortable as a
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park
due to the required quiet
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place
.
Moreover
,
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some
entertainment
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places
do not
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let
sightseers or audiences bring food or drinks.
Hence
, if the city
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park
has food stalls and
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live
music, it is the best choice for
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people
to
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come
here for entertainment.

In conclusion
, Cay Sop
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park
is
extremely
essential for locals in Dong Hung
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Thuan
ward. We should conserve the
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park
to avoid damage
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because
it is a public
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place
that
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people
can entertain
jointly
as well
as socialize.
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IELTS essay Write an analysis essay about a particular public place and suggest ways to make it more appealing.

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