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Write about the following topic: “your first love”

Write about the following topic: “your first love” y7R6g
At age fifteen, I met my first love when I was in middle school. I’ve been loving him for a long time, but never thought we’d be together. Because I knew, he broken up with an ex-lover and he still loved her. That spring, he confessed to me, and then it all started when I had my first actual boyfriend. I met someone who didn’t love me. As soon as he confessed to me, I immediately agreed. I was so happy inside that I wanted to cry. I’m extremely nervous and worried about the two’s love life in the future. Then we had a very happy time, in everyone’s eyes, our love is beautiful. Being together and dating for over four months, which in my mind was equivalent to a lifetime, at that time I thought we would be together forever. Suddenly, one day, when I was walking alone around the schoolyard, enjoying the cool atmosphere, my best friend ran up to me and told me that my lover still loved his ex. After breaking up with his ex, he came to me just to annoy his ex-girlfriend and he didn’t love me at all. At that time, I could feel chilling tears stream profusely down my reddened cheeks. I felt my heart sank. I didn’t know how to face myself after knowing I was just a replacement. Not long after that, I said goodbye to him in the hope that he could go back to the one he loved. But the answer I got from him was that he loved me. But it was too late, I couldn’t forgive him. We were through and I didn’t wanna hear his excuses anymore. Later, he continued to pursue me. Because I was too hurt and wanted to focus on my studies, I repeatedly refused. At school everything was awkward, and we had a lot of people talking about us. I felt so uncomfortable when people talked about us. Finally, he persistently pursued me until now. And I still only see him as a friend. Now, our relationship is very good. For me, he was my first love, because he showed me what love is. First love will never be forgotten in my mind. It’s beautiful, but it’s also very painful. Without him, I would not know how to love others and appreciate what I have. The most basic thing when falling in love with someone is to forget about your ex, that is the most basic respect when starting a love relationship. And once hurt, instead of choosing to forgive, I will choose to give up.
At age fifteen, I met my
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when I was in middle school. I’ve been loving him for a long
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time
,
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but
never
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thought
we’d be together.
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Because
I knew,
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he
broken up with an
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ex-lover and
he
still
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loved
her. That spring, he confessed to me, and then it all
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started
when I had my
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first
actual boyfriend. I met someone who didn’t
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love
me.

As
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soon
as he confessed to me, I immediately
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agreed
. I was
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so
happy inside that I wanted to cry. I’m
extremely
nervous and worried about the two’s
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love
life in the future. Then we had a
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very
happy
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time
, in everyone’s eyes, our
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love
is
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beautiful
. Being together and dating for over four months, which in my mind was equivalent to a lifetime, at that
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time
I
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thought
we would be together forever.
Suddenly
, one day, when I was walking alone around the schoolyard, enjoying the cool atmosphere, my best friend ran up to me and
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told
me that my lover
still
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loved
his ex. After breaking up with his ex, he came to me
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just
to annoy his
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ex-girlfriend and
he didn’t
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love
me at all. At that
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time
, I could feel chilling tears stream
profusely
down my reddened cheeks. I felt my heart sank. I didn’t know how to face myself after knowing I was
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just
a replacement. Not long after that, I said goodbye to him in the hope that he could go back to the one he
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loved
.
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But
the answer I
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got
from him was that he
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loved
me.
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it was too late, I couldn’t forgive him. We were through and I didn’t
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hear his excuses anymore. Later, he continued to pursue me.
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Because
I was
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too hurt
and wanted to focus on my studies, I
repeatedly
refused. At school everything was awkward, and we had
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a lot of
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people
talking about us. I felt
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so
uncomfortable when
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people
talked about us.
Finally
, he
persistently
pursued me until
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. And I
still
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see
him as a friend.
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, our relationship is
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very
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good
.

For me, he was my
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first
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love
,
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because
he
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showed
me what
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love
is.
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First
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love
will never
be forgotten
in my mind. It’s
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beautiful
,
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it’s
also
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painful. Without him, I would not know how to
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love
others and appreciate what I have. The most basic thing when falling in
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love
with someone is to forget about your ex,
that is
the most basic respect when starting a
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love
relationship. And once hurt,
instead
of choosing to forgive, I will choose to give up.
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IELTS essay Write about the following topic: “your first love”

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
435 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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