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There are many factors which we can consider to select a job for our future. Some people said that a high salary is the most important thing.

There are many factors which we can consider to select a job for our future. Some people said that a high salary is the most important thing. B7a1X
There are many factors which we can consider to select a job for our future. Some people said that a high salary is the most important thing. I totally agree with that opinion, because income is the clearest reward to any employees for their aptitude and also, that will contribute to making employees’ private life become better. Firstly, workers’ aptitude is recognized by the salary they are paid. Actually, when we start to choose one job between many options, promotion opportunity, company culture and income are three virtual things we consider the most. Promotion chance and company culture are highly important, but they do not exist in the near-sighted. At the same time, a high income is clearer. If newbies have a great salary even when they’ve just started their job, there more chances they are paid the same or higher one in the future. Secondly, a better private life, a better working effort, and employees’ finance can be the root cause reason for that. It cannot be denied that money is important for any person to maintain their life in the best conditions. Salary is used to pay for accomodations, food, clothing, vehicles, family and entertainment. So if a man has a high salary, he wil have more money to pay for life, and also, he wiill have enough conditions to contribute for working. In conclusion, a high income is the best way to recognize employees’ capability and make workers’ better. For that reason, I rely on that opinion to choose a career for my future.
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consider to select
a job for our future.
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said that a
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is the most
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thing. I
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agree
with that opinion,
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income
is the clearest reward to any
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employees
for their aptitude and
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, that will contribute to making
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employees’
private
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life
become better.

Firstly
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by the
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salary
they
are paid
. Actually, when we
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to choose one job between
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options, promotion opportunity,
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company
culture and
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income
are three virtual things we consider the most. Promotion chance and
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company
culture are
highly
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important
,
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they do not exist in the near-sighted. At the same time, a
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high
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income
is clearer. If newbies have a great
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salary
even when they’ve
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started
their job, there more chances they
are paid
the same or higher one in the future.

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, a better private
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life
, a better working effort, and
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employees’
finance can be the root cause reason for that. It cannot
be denied
that money is
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important
for any person to maintain their
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life
in the best conditions.
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Salary
is
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used
to pay for
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accomodations
, food, clothing, vehicles, family and entertainment.
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if a
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man
has a
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high
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, he
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have more money to pay for
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life
, and
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have
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enough
conditions to contribute for working.

In conclusion
, a
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high
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income
is the best way to recognize
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employees’
capability and
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make
workers’ better. For that reason, I rely on that opinion to choose a career for my future.
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IELTS essay There are many factors which we can consider to select a job for our future. Some people said that a high salary is the most important thing.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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