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write about the following topic: Some people think that parent should teach children how to be good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion? Write at least 250 wor v.1

: Some people think that parent should teach children how to be good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Write at least 250 wor v. 1
It is fact that online shopping plays a very important role in individuals' lives and there is no doubt nowadays most of the people are gravitating towards online shopping. There are ample of reasons behind this as well as online shopping is good for our atmosphere and it also create a lot of employment in all domains. My inclination is justified in the ensuing paragraphs. Discussing the reasons, one of the main reason is online shopping reduces the traffic jam related problem which commonly occurs due to the presence of private vehicles near the traffic light where these vehicles create a lot of pollution in the environment. What is more, individuals can easily preserve their natural resources by saving fuel, whereas, online shopping has its own, bad consequences on the environment, first and foremost problem is deforestation and the other one is that online shopping industries are using a lot of non-biodegradable plastics for packing purposes. To support my claim I can quote an example of MNCs like Flipkart, Amazon, etc. , such type of industries used wooden blocks and harmful plastic bags for their material packing. On the contrary, there is one school of thought that in this era of inflated money is everything. Despite, knowing this fact that "lack of money is the root of all evil" and there is no doubt that the requirement has been fulfilled by providing employment in their organisations. To exemplify this in a recent survey researcher has revealed that these online shopping organisations earning a lot of benefits or profit from their methods or approach. To put it in a nutshell, it can be said that online shopping has its own "pros and cons". As such, it is indeed true that if these organisations start focusing towards our mother nature and start using bio-degradable material from our environment, then no doubt this situation can act like a "hand and gloves" for all of them
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plays a
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very
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important
role in individuals'
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lives
and there is no doubt nowadays most of the
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people
are gravitating towards
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online
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shopping
. There are ample of reasons behind this
as well
as
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online
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shopping
is
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good
for our atmosphere and it
also
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create
a
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lot
of employment in all domains. My inclination
is justified
in the ensuing paragraphs.

Discussing the reasons, one of the main reason is
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online
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shopping
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reduces
the traffic jam related problem which
commonly
occurs due to the presence of private vehicles near the traffic light where these vehicles create a
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lot
of pollution in the environment.
What is more
, individuals can
easily
preserve their natural resources by saving fuel, whereas,
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online
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shopping
has its
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own
,
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bad
consequences on the environment,
first
and foremost problem is deforestation and the other one is that
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online
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shopping
industries are using a
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lot
of non-biodegradable plastics for packing purposes. To support my claim I can quote an example of
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MNCs
like Flipkart, Amazon, etc.
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,
such type of industries
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used
wooden blocks and harmful plastic bags for their material packing.

On the contrary
, there is one school of
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thought
that in this era of inflated money is everything. Despite, knowing this fact that
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lack of money is the root of all evil
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and there is no doubt that the requirement has
been fulfilled
by providing employment in their
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organisations
. To exemplify this in a recent survey researcher has revealed that these
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online
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shopping
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organisations
earning a
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lot
of benefits or profit from their methods or approach.

To put it in a nutshell, it can
be said
that
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online
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shopping
has its
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own
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"
pros and cons
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"
. As such, it is
indeed
true that if these
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organisations
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start
focusing towards our mother nature and
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start
using bio-degradable material from our environment, then no doubt this situation can act like a
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"
hand and gloves
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"
for all of
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them
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay : Some people think that parent should teach children how to be good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Write at least 250 wor v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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