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write about the following topic: Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? Write at least 250 words v.2

: Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 2
Solving growing traffic and pollution issues by escalating fuel prices drags immediate attention owing to its versatility. Some of us assert upon the idea of increasing fuel prices in order to discourage people using private vehicles for commuting. I strongly oppose this idea as it will certainly have more negative impacts rather than positive. Let' s discuss all the dimension of the topic before reaching to a final verdict. To begin with, in order to support my logic, I would like to quote an example here. For instance, by escalating fuel prices, country’s economic stability would get impacted. Incremental fuel prices are directly proportional to masses consumption and inflation situation of any country. Furthermore, this phenomenon would adversely affect masses life standard and comfort. Subsequently other consumption product prices will increase. In order to resolve the traffic growth and pollution issues, we must focus on other possible solutions. Such as Government should play their part by running awareness campaigns over pollution backed up by monetary benefits. In addition to this, Media has a pivotal role in realization campaigns on how to reduce pollution by using clean fuel. Another appropriate solution is to standardize transport system with economical fares so that people are encouraged to use local transport instead of private vehicles for daily commuting. To recapitulate the aforementioned argument, I would like to bring the point to home. Raising fuel prices is not a solution to the given problem, rather it would become a reason to many issues such as inflation consequently, if implemented. Pollution and traffic issues are major concerns for any country nowadays, which should be dealt with organized planning and detailed analysis. Before implementing any solution, we must consider all pros and cons and must prepare mitigation plan in order to avoid any disastrous situation.
Solving growing traffic and
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pollution
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issues
by escalating
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fuel
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prices
drags immediate attention owing to its versatility.
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of us assert upon the
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idea
of increasing
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fuel
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prices
in
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order
to discourage
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people
using private vehicles for commuting. I
strongly
oppose this
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idea
as it will
certainly
have more
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negative
impacts
rather
than
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positive
.
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before
reaching to a final verdict.

To
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begin
with, in
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order
to support my logic, I would like to quote an example here.
For instance
, by escalating
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fuel
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prices
, country’s economic stability would
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get
impacted. Incremental
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fuel
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prices
are
directly
proportional to masses consumption and inflation situation of any country.
Furthermore
, this phenomenon would
adversely
affect masses life standard and comfort.
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Subsequently
other consumption product
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prices
will increase.

In
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order
to resolve the traffic growth and
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pollution
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issues
, we
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must
focus on other possible
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solutions
. Such as
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Government
should play their part by running awareness campaigns over
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pollution
backed up by monetary benefits.
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to this, Media has a pivotal role in realization campaigns on how to
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reduce
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pollution
by using clean
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fuel
. Another appropriate
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solution
is to standardize transport system with economical fares
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so
that
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people
are encouraged
to
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use
local transport
instead
of private vehicles for daily commuting.

To recapitulate the aforementioned argument, I would like to bring the point to home. Raising
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fuel
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prices
is not a
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solution
to the
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given
problem,
rather
it would become a reason to
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many
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issues
such as inflation
consequently
, if implemented.
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Pollution
and traffic
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issues
are major concerns for any country nowadays, which should
be dealt
with organized planning and detailed analysis.
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Before
implementing any
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solution
, we
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must
consider all pros and cons and
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must
prepare mitigation plan in
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order
to avoid any disastrous situation.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay : Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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