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write about the following topic: Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? Write at least 250 words v.1

: Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 1
In the modern world, the majority of the members of society come up with the idea that the female leaders are good managers in order to save a peace over the government. However, others hold an opinion that male leaders cannot be replaced by females. There is no denying that if the females take high positions, the ruling system of the country will be changed. However, many individuals do not believe that they can bring a peace to the government, because many wars and conflicts between the countries have happened because of women. In other words, many kinds in the middle ages have started wars because of women. A good illustration of this is the film of Troy. In this movie, a main character, a king of Troy, started a war because his wife slept with another king's son. On the other hand, some people tend to think that women are capable to bring a peace to the country. This is because, they are gentle and they are not willing to hurt someone's feelings. Accordingly, if they run the country, they can avoid violences and conflicts. For example, several governments, such as New Zeland and Croatia have been running with the female leader for a long time. Unsurprisingly, these years remain the most peaceful in the modern history of these countries. In conclusion, although many people are keen to vote for women in order to reduce violence, however, this method is not a viable option, because other people believe that the main causes of wars and conflicts were women in the middle ages.
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up with the
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idea
that the female leaders are
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good
managers in order to save a peace over the
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government
.
However
, others hold an opinion that male leaders cannot
be replaced
by females.

There is no denying that if the females take high positions, the ruling system of the
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country
will be
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changed
.
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government
,
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because
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women
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middle ages
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women
. A
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his wife slept with another king's son.

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women
are capable to bring a peace to the
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country
. This is
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, they are
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gentle and
they are not willing to hurt someone's feelings.
Accordingly
, if they run the
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country
, they can avoid violences and conflicts.
For example
, several
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governments
, such as New
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Zeland
and Croatia have been running with the female leader for a long time.
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, these years remain the most peaceful in the modern history of these countries.

In conclusion
, although
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people
are keen to vote for
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women
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reduce
violence,
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, this method is not a viable option,
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other
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people
believe that the main causes of
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and conflicts were
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women
in the
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middle ages
.
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IELTS essay : Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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