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Write about the following topic. The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should v.32

The internet has greatly increased our access to information. You should v. 32
There is no doubt that internet has become an integral tool for information access. There are many people who think this is a great step towards improvement in quality of life, while others argue that it is mostly waste of time. In this essay, I am going to discuss both sides of the argument and explain my support for the former view. One of the biggest argument against this easy availability of information is its' addictive nature. This is an undeniable fact that people nowadays spend huge amount of time on the Internet for mostly social networking and entertainment. For example, Facebook has more than 1 billion users with an average time engagement of 2 hours per day. This results in, serious loss of productivity, because the same time could have been spent on some better activity like exercising, studying or working. However, this problem can be tackled with some initiatives by internet companies like allowing limited time usage for every user. On the other hand, the most significant impact of the Internet is knowledge-sharing and emergence of collaborative ideas from researchers across the globe. For example, joint research between two scientist of two different countries is not only possible, but also very common nowadays. Furthermore, internet allows people to share important moments with their loved ones who may be on the other side of globe. As a result, people feel a lot more connected with their family. In conclusion, while there are few drawbacks with ease of information like unfruitful usage of time, these must be weighted against the benefits like collaborative research and easy communication. Personally, I feel these benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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my support for the former view.

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nowadays spend huge amount of
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on the Internet for
mostly
social networking and entertainment.
For example
, Facebook has more than 1 billion users with an average
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time
engagement of 2 hours per day. This results in, serious loss of productivity,
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could have
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some
better activity like exercising, studying or working.
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be tackled
with
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some
initiatives by internet
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companies
like allowing limited
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usage for every user.

On the other hand
, the most significant impact of the Internet is knowledge-sharing and emergence of collaborative
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ideas
from researchers across the globe.
For example
, joint research between two
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, internet
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to share
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important
moments with their
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loved
ones who may be on the other side of globe.
As a result
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feel a lot more connected with their family.

In conclusion
, while there are few drawbacks with
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of information like unfruitful usage of
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, these
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must
be weighted
against the benefits like collaborative research and easy communication.
Personally
, I feel these benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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IELTS essay The internet has greatly increased our access to information. You should v. 32

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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