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Write about a goal you want to achieve and how you will achieve it.

Write about a goal you want to achieve and how you will achieve it. RN05p
Talking about my primary goal, my main goal is to live in Halifax Canada. Halifax is an amazing city in the west of Canada near the beach and with a good economy. The reason that I want to move there is because I want to provide a better lifestyle for my family like my son student in a good school of a good education and go out in a safe place without being scared as I am in Brazil. To achieve that I have been studying English every day and saving money, in the next year my wife and I will do the IELTS and we hope to achieve a CLB 9.
Talking about my primary goal, my main goal is to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in Halifax Canada. Halifax is an amazing city in the west of Canada near the beach and with a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
economy.

The reason that I want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
there is
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because
I want to provide a better lifestyle for my family like my son student in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
school of a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
education and go out in a safe place without
being scared
as I am in Brazil.

To achieve that I have been studying English every day and saving money, in the
next
year my wife and I will do the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
IELTS and
we hope to achieve a CLB 9.

IELTS essay Write about a goal you want to achieve and how you will achieve it.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
112 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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