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I watched a movie last night was the Home last night. It was a South Indian film in the Malayalam language. I watched that film in my home theater in the evening. The movie is a story of a middle-class family. In this film a golden aged man whose name was George. He has father, wife, and two sons. His father's name was Mathew and he was a dementia patient. His wife's name was Elsa and she was a retired nurse and the whole family was run by her pension. Their younger son was Joe and he was a student. George's elder son whose name was Dan and he was an architect and he left his job for cinema direction. His first cinema became a mega-hit and he couldn't do any more film after his first cinema. Dan was frustrated due to the non-growth of his film carrier and he always makes fighting with his fiancee Emma. George reveals his younger age adventures to motivate his moody elder son but he didn't believe it. But he impressed only his girlfriend's dad's books and talks. The girlfriend's grandma tells the story of the unknown boy helping her poisoned son to take hospital from a remote area. After hearing the story from grandma the elder son impressed his dad. He tells his Girlfriend's family about the real hero in the birthday party's story. Girlfriends' entire family came to George's house and praised his work in his younger age. I saw this film because the film viewers' review was 10 out of 10. I watched that film with my whole family.
I
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watched
a movie last night was the Home last night. It was a South Indian film in the Malayalam language. I
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watched
that film in my home theater in the evening.

The movie is a
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story
of a middle-
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class
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family
. In this film a golden aged
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man
whose
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name
was George. He has
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father
, wife, and two
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sons
. His father's
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name
was
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Mathew and
he was a dementia patient. His wife's
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name
was
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Elsa and
she was a retired nurse and the whole
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family
was run
by her pension. Their younger
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son
was Joe and he was a student. George's elder
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son
whose
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name
was
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Dan and
he was an
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architect and
he
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left
his job for cinema direction. His
first
cinema became a
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mega-hit and
he couldn't do any more film after his
first
cinema. Dan
was frustrated
due to the non-growth of his film
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carrier and
he always
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makes
fighting with his
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fiancee
Emma. George reveals his younger age adventures to motivate his moody elder
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son
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but
he didn't believe it.
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But
he impressed
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only
his girlfriend's dad's books and talks. The girlfriend's grandma
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tells
the
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story
of the unknown boy helping her poisoned
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son
to take hospital from a remote area.
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After
hearing the
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story
from grandma the elder
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son
impressed his dad. He
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tells
his Girlfriend's
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family
about the real hero in the birthday party's
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story
. Girlfriends' entire
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family
came to George's
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house
and praised his work in his younger age.

I
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saw
this film
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because
the film viewers' review was 10 out of 10. I
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watched
that film with my whole
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family
.
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IELTS essay Write a story about film last seen

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
268 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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