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Write a plan for new family business

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We are planning to open a cake store which name is “Dream Cake”. The first section of the business plan is choose a place to sell. The perfect location is by the sea because when everyone is done swimming they will be hungry, so our bakery can attract them to come. Then, to opening bakery with a variety of cakes we need to prepare an amount of money about 40-50 milion. This money will be spent to buy ingredients, baking items and decorative furniture. Our cake store is going to open from 6 am to 9 pm, enough time for customers to freely choose. My mother will be in charge of baking, my father will help her and I will sell cakes while my sister will stand at the checkout.

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choose
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 swimming they will be hungry, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 our bakery can attract them to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
. Then, to opening bakery with a variety of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withloaf
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milion
. This money will be spent
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buy
 ingredients, baking items and decorative furniture. Our You use this word too often, consider replacing it withloaf
cake
 store is going to open from 6 am to 9 pm, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
enough
 time for customers to freely
 choose. My mother will be in charge of baking, my father will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
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