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write a paragraph to tell your friend about your working day

write a paragraph to tell your friend about your working day 75Gp3
After a day with a lot of work, exercises, . . . you must be tired and need time to relax. So what do you do in your free time: cooking, shopping or watching TV? In my free time, I like reading books because they are useful and interesting. Reading books helps me improve my knowledge of all areas that I want to research. Like most men, I love football. So in my free time, I usually play football to increase my overall health. Besides, when I have more time, I go out with my friends to relax after a hard-working day. That is how I spend my free time, what’s yours?
After a day with
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to relax.
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So
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free
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time
: cooking, shopping or watching TV? In my
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free
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time
, I like reading books
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because
they are useful and interesting. Reading books
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helps
me
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improve
my knowledge of all areas that I want to research. Like most
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men
, I
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love
football.
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So
in my
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free
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time
, I
usually
play football to increase my
overall
health.
Besides
, when I have more
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time
, I go out with my friends to relax after a
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-working day.
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how I spend my
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, what’s yours?

IELTS essay write a paragraph to tell your friend about your working day

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
112 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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