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write a paragraph of about 150 words about your dreams

write a paragraph of about 150 words about your dreams RVoE8
The world is changing day by day but my dream will never change. I want to be a bussiness woman. Some people think if women become a business, they will exhaust. But I strongly believe that everyone can allow what ever they want. To become a bussiness in the future, I always try to study knowledge such as Maths, Literature and English. Beside that, I learn from my parent how to behave with everyone in work. My mother always support my dream that make me very happy. There are some reasons that I want to be a bussiness woman. Firstly, I will study a lot of experience from our life. For instance, when I meet customer, I can get knowledge from them. Secondly, I want to be a rich woman to buy everything my parents like, I think my parents will proud of me when I successful. Finally, when I become a bussiness, beside go to work I will go volunteer for disadvantaged people. It is really meaningful in my life. In conclusion, I think I will get my dream if I work as hard as I am now.
The world is changing day by day
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my dream will never
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change
. I
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want
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bussiness
woman.
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Some
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people
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think
if women become a business, they will exhaust.
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But
I
strongly
believe that everyone can
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allow
what ever they
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want
. To become a
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bussiness
in the future, I always try to study knowledge such as
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Maths
, Literature and English. Beside that, I learn from my parent how to behave with everyone in work. My mother always support my dream that
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make
me
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very
happy. There are
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some
reasons that I
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want
to be a
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bussiness
woman.
Firstly
, I will study
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a lot of
experience from our life.
For instance
, when I
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meet
customer, I can
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get
knowledge from them.
Secondly
, I
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want
to be a rich woman to
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buy
everything my parents like, I
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think
my parents will proud of me when I successful.
Finally
, when I become a
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bussiness
, beside go to work I will go volunteer for disadvantaged
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people
. It is
really
meaningful in my life.
In conclusion
, I
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think
I will
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get
my dream if I work as
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hard
as I am
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now
.
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IELTS essay write a paragraph of about 150 words about your dreams

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
189 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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