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In your opinion, should students be allowed to evaluate their teachers? If, yes in which ways can we do this?

In your opinion, should students be allowed to evaluate their teachers? If, yes in which ways can we do this? PEj9d
Almost all people are grown in their nation’s education system. Students in high schools or universities studying a lot of subjects aim to go into the real world and use the knowledge they were instructed to build their lives by themselves. Nevertheless, what the real world needs in a person is different from what schools or universities provide him with. Therefore, I totally agree that the education system does not prepare a student for the real world. A person who desires a successful life in the real world needs to meet many demands in various aspects such as his career, his soft skills like the way he treats other people, how he overcomes obstacles and so on. Undeniably, the education system allows us to study a lot of knowledge which is essential to our future jobs, however, the amount of knowledge is not enough for competing in the labour market. The thing could be noticed that the main knowledge in schools are theories and students have few practising lessons. Each day, students go to school just to listen to what teachers impart with the thick books on the table and the final tests check the number of theories they tried to learn by heart. The result is that students can not deeply understand their subjects and do not have any practical experience. Moreover, according to almost all students who have just graduated and applied for companies, they have to spend one or two years in order to take part in the training courses of their companies. Besides, these students also assume that they realize now the knowledge they must study more than one they had to study in the time they went to school. On the other hand, soft skills also play an important role for students in their grown-up lives. Although the soft skills are taken care of by schools, there are some subjects such as “Controlling emotions and resolving conflicts skills", “management time and solving problems skills” or “Critical thinking and creative thinking” as well. I believe these subjects also help students partially improve and develop their soft skills, especially if teachers teaching these subjects are people with life experiences or psychologists, students could learn something from the stories of these teachers and their life lessons. Nonetheless, it is only the life experiences of teachers, students just a listener listening to the life and advice of different individuals. The soft skills of a person are established well when this person experiences the world by himself. For example, students having part-time jobs confront conflicting situations, after they resolve these conflicts they take their own experience for the same situations later and remember it longer. In other words, the ways people learn soft skills in school and in the real world are clearly expressed through the quote of Tom Bodett: “In school, you’re taught a lesson and then given a test. In life, you’re given a test that teaches you a lesson”. In conclusion, the real world has various shapes and the education system just gives students few things to start the first steps in their futures. Therefore, students have to cultivate their minds and improve their soft skills on their own with the goal of having good lives afterwards.
Almost all
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people
are grown
in their nation’s
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education
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system
.
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Students
in high
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schools
or universities studying
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a lot of
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subjects
aim to go into the
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real
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world
and
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use
the
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knowledge
they
were instructed
to build their
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lives
by themselves.
Nevertheless
, what the
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real
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world
needs in a
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person
is
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different
from what
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schools
or universities provide him with.
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, I
totally
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agree
that the
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education
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system
does not prepare a
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student
for the
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real
world.

A
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person
who desires a successful
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life
in the
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real
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world
needs to
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meet
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many
demands in various aspects such as his career, his
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soft
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skills
like the way he treats other
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people
, how he overcomes obstacles and
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so
on.
Undeniably
, the
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education
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system
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allows
us to study
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a lot of
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knowledge
which is essential to our future jobs,
however
, the amount of
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knowledge
is not
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enough
for competing in the
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labour
market. The thing could
be noticed
that the main
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knowledge
in
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schools
are theories and
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students
have few
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practising
lessons. Each day,
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students
go to
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school
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just
to listen to what
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teachers
impart with the thick books on the table and the final
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tests
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check
the number of theories they tried to learn by heart. The result is that
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students
can not
deeply
understand their
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subjects
and do not have any practical
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experience
.
Moreover
, according to almost all
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students
who have
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just
graduated and applied for
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companies
, they
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have to
spend one or two years in order to
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take part
in the training courses of their
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companies
.
Besides
, these
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students
also
assume that they realize
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now
the
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knowledge
they
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must
study more than one they had to study in the time they went to school.

On the other hand
,
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soft
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skills
also
play an
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important
role for
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students
in their grown-up
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lives
. Although the
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soft
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skills
are taken
care of by
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schools
, there are
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some
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subjects
such as “Controlling emotions and resolving conflicts
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skills
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, “management time and solving problems
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skills”
or “Critical thinking and creative thinking”
as well
. I believe these
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subjects
also
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help
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students
partially
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improve
and develop their
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soft
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skills
,
especially
if
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teachers
teaching these
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subjects
are
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people
with
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life
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experiences
or psychologists,
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students
could learn something from the stories of these
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teachers
and their
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life
lessons. Nonetheless, it is
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only
the
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life
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experiences
of
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teachers
,
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students
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just
a listener listening to the
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life
and advice of
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different
individuals. The
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soft
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skills
of a
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person
are established
well when this
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person
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experiences
the
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world
by himself.
For example
,
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students
having part-time jobs confront conflicting situations, after they resolve these conflicts they take their
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own
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experience
for the same situations later and remember it longer.
In other words
, the ways
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people
learn
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soft
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skills
in
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school
and in the
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real
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world
are
clearly
expressed through the quote of Tom
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Bodett
: “In
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school
, you’re taught a lesson and then
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given
a
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test
. In
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life
, you’re
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given
a
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test
that teaches you a lesson”.

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In
conclusion, the
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real
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world
has various shapes and the
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education
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system
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just
gives
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students
few things to
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start
the
first
steps in their futures.
Therefore
,
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students
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have to
cultivate their minds and
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improve
their
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soft
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skills
on their
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own
with the goal of having
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good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
afterwards.
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IELTS essay In your opinion, should students be allowed to evaluate their teachers? If, yes in which ways can we do this?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
540 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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