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Write a paragraph about the advantages and disadvantages of using social media platforms

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Nowadays, social media platforms are becoming more and more popular with humans, from the young to the old. With the development of technology, internet widen its range and influence every user with both benefits and drawback. Social media creates a virtual society, where users can connect to each others via internet despite of distances. It has become a place for mutual hobbies and similar culturals to meet and share everything they want. Virtual platforms not only give changes for teenagers and adults to express their feelings and create daily posts about their life like a diary but also give them a change to be famous with thousand of followers. But social media has its own problems, which can not be unseen. Every security platfrom has mistakes, and that is where hackers can create chaos and steel users's personal information. Not like robbing a bank, virtual criminals can hide themseft, use fake IDs and completely hard to be figured out. Some drawbacks also come from the users, who sometime can not control their behaviors and bring unhealthy things to the internet. Those users effect the mutual community, which turn the platfrom from a nice place to a messy one with different types of content. Videos and posts can create addiction, since people are interested in new things that they have not seen before or have not experienced. Critisism from strangers while people are posting online can also create bad affects, stress and anxiety with ones who can not deal with mental problems. Many suicides are said to come from those bad comments. In conclusion, advantages and disadvantages are clearly to be seen, but to reduce the harmful side, user play an importance role in improving their own social media platfroms.
Nowadays,
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social
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platforms are becoming more and more popular with humans, from the young to the
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old
. With the development of technology, internet widen its range and influence every
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user
with both benefits and drawback.
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Social
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media
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creates
a virtual society, where
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users
can connect to each
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others
via internet
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despite of
distances. It has become a place for mutual hobbies and similar
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culturals
to
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meet
and share everything they want. Virtual platforms not
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only
give
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changes
for
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teenagers
and adults to express their feelings and
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create
daily posts about their life like a diary
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but
also
give them a
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change
to be
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famous
with
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thousand
of followers.
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But
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social
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media
has its
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own
problems, which can not be unseen. Every security
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platfrom
has mistakes, and
that is
where hackers can
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create
chaos and steel
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users's
personal information. Not like robbing a bank, virtual criminals can
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hide
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themseft
,
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use
fake IDs and completely
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hard
to
be figured
out.
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Some
drawbacks
also
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come
from the
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users
, who sometime can not control their behaviors and bring unhealthy things to the internet. Those
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users
effect the mutual community, which turn the
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platfrom
from a nice place to a messy one with
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different
types of content. Videos and posts can
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create
addiction, since
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people
are interested
in new things that they have not
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seen
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before
or have not experienced.
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Critisism
from strangers while
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people
are posting online can
also
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create
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bad
affects,
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stress
and anxiety with ones who can not deal with mental problems.
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Many
suicides
are said
to
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come
from those
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bad
comments.
In conclusion
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clearly
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seen
,
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but
to
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reduce
the harmful side,
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user
play an importance role in improving their
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own
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social
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media
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platfroms
.
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IELTS essay Write a paragraph about the advantages and disadvantages of using social media platforms

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
289 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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