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Write a paragraph about negative sides when living in the city

Write a paragraph about negative sides when living in the city pKRPa
Living in the cities has some harm. Firstly, the problem of the air. The air in the city is bad, it is negative of people's health, so this is cause of respiratory diseases. And bad affect about the environment. Secondly, traffic problems, nowaday has a lots of vehicle so it is the causes of traffic accident and traffic jams. Thirdly! At night, in the city is so noise and has a lot of light. It's from the lights and traffics so it's can make people headache and eyestrain or more. . . Next, the water pollution from the some people no sense litter in the river. It make the fish and underwater animals sick, and whose people use this water will sick and intestinal disease. . . . That is one of the negative sides when living in the city. So people should protect the enviroment, contribute to making the living space is fresh and green more.
Living in the
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's health,
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this is cause of respiratory diseases. And
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bad
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affect
about the environment.
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traffic
problems,
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nowaday
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of vehicle
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accident and
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jams.
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! At night, in the city is
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noise and has
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a lot of
light. It's from the lights and
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traffics
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so
it's can
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make
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people
headache and eyestrain or more.
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, the water pollution from the
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some
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people
no sense litter in the river. It
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make
the fish and underwater animals sick, and whose
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people
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use
this water will sick and intestinal disease.
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sides when living in the city.
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should protect the
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enviroment
, contribute to making the living space is fresh and green more.

IELTS essay Write a paragraph about negative sides when living in the city

Essay
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1 paragraphs
157 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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