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Write a paragraph about how to maintain your culture identity

Write a paragraph about how to maintain your culture identity 8Lnp5
Today's globalised society has made our culture identity gradually fading away by contacting with many different cultures, so we should know a lot of ways to maintain it. As you all know, language is the most important factor in the accumulation of culture. Thus, preserving our native language plays a vital role in keeping our own culture identity. Besides, we can advertise and enhance our natural beauty to people all around the world with a view to bearing our culture in mind. Last but not least, we should make an effort to keep in touch with our families and friends if we are away from home. This will help us stay connected to our heritage and simultaneously remind us about our culture identity. Through three ways I have outlined above, it can be seen that we can keep our own cultural identity wherever we are.
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culture
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identity
gradually
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different
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cultures
,
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we should know
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a lot of
ways to maintain it. As you all know, language is the most
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important
factor in the accumulation of
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culture
.
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own
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culture
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identity
.
Besides
, we can advertise and enhance our natural beauty to
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people
all around the world with a view to bearing our
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culture
in mind. Last
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but
not least, we should
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make
an effort to
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keep
in touch with our families and friends if we are away from home. This will
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help
us stay connected to our heritage and
simultaneously
remind us about our
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culture
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identity
. Through three ways I have outlined above, it can be
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seen
that we can
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keep
our
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own
cultural
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identity
wherever we are.
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IELTS essay Write a paragraph about how to maintain your culture identity

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
145 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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