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Write a essay that express, describes, introduce yourself to strangers?

Write a essay that express, describes, introduce yourself to strangers? gbgj1
My name is Lien. Quach, and I currently I the senior years in high school. My family have three members included me, I live with my mother and my older brother. My brother older than me six-year-old and we quite have opposite personality. Having a pet is my dream gift, I really like dog and cats but don’t have opportunity to have one, but I’m sure that I will adopt one in the future. I like when people really listening to me when I’m talking because it really annoying me when they don’t listen what I’m say and ask again me what I’m saying. I don’t like people judging me when I’m doing somethings different than usually, I do. I have been live in California two year ago before move to Houston, Texas. If I have free time I usually do meditate, or watching movies. I don’t have a job right now, but I plan to get a job before I get into colleges, because of inconvenience of transportation I can’t to work in high school time. In my view, being a good teacher is so important and is definitely hard to achieve, but in my opinion a good teacher need to have a good explanation, make the lesson simple to student to understand, help student when they struggling or need help, and care about them. Contrary to a good teacher, in my definition a bad teacher is ignorant student help and explain the lesson so complex. What make me really down when I’m in class is teacher plan lesson of the day is all lectures, because to me lectures is so boring and make me feel so sleepy, can’t focus to the lesson. The method I learn the best is given examples, examples really help me understanding the main point, the purpose of the lesson. I’m taking food science because I want to learn how nutrition help ours body and system. Food is everything to me, and I used to eat “bad food”, and you all know how “bad food” is good. So, I changing my eating habit to the healthy way, and want to learn what kind of fruit, meat, fish, vegetable contain
My name is Lien.
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Quach
, and I
currently
I the senior years in high school. My family have three members included me, I
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live
with my mother and my older brother. My brother older than me six-year-
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old
and we quite have opposite personality. Having a pet is my dream gift, I
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really
like dog and cats
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but
don’t have opportunity to have one,
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but
I’m sure that I will adopt one in the future. I like when
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people
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really
listening to me when I’m talking
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because
it
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really
annoying me when they don’t listen what I’m say and ask again me what I’m saying. I don’t like
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people
judging me when I’m doing somethings
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different
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than
usually
, I do.
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I
have been
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live
in California two year ago
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before
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move
to Houston, Texas. If I have free time I
usually
do meditate, or watching movies. I don’t have a job right
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now
,
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but
I plan to
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get
a job
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before
I
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get
into colleges,
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because
of inconvenience of transportation I can’t to work in high school time.

In my view, being a
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good
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teacher
is
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so
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important
and is definitely
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hard
to achieve,
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but
in my opinion a
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good
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teacher
need to have a
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good
explanation,
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make
the
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lesson
simple to student to understand,
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help
student when
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they struggling
or need
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help
, and care about them. Contrary to a
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good
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teacher
, in my definition a
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bad
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teacher
is ignorant student
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help
and
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explain
the
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lesson
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so
complex. What
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make
me
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really
down when I’m in
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class
is
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teacher
plan
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lesson
of the day is all lectures,
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because
to me lectures is
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so
boring and
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make
me feel
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so
sleepy, can’t focus to the
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lesson
. The method I learn the best is
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given
examples, examples
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really
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help
me
The verb ',' is used with an infinitive: "to understand" or "understand".
understanding
the main point, the purpose of the lesson.

I’m taking
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food
science
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because
I want to learn how nutrition
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help
ours body and system.
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Food
is everything to me, and I
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used
to eat “
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bad
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food”
, and you all know how “
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bad
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food”
is
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good
.
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So
,
Did you mean "I'm changing", "I am changing", or "I was changing"?
I changing
my eating habit to the healthy way, and want to learn what kind of fruit, meat, fish, vegetable contain
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IELTS essay Write a essay that express, describes, introduce yourself to strangers?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
364 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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