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why do teenagers commit suicide

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Suicide is a dominant cause of death among teenagers and young adults. The rate of suicides and suicide attempts increases from time to time. For some, suicide is the permanent solution to a temporary problem and most pressing public health issues across the world. Suicides case is so often these days even becoming a trend and we are not even flinch anymore. The depression and substances abuse for teenagers currently become issues that lead to suicide cases among teenagers. They cannot adapt with that situation and tends to solve it by attempting suicide. Teenagers commit suicide because they cannot cope with the stress related matter such as depression and substances abuse, but counseling session, reading and watching films, and also highest attention from parents can reduce the number of suicide from increasing day by day.
Suicide is a dominant cause of death among
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teenagers
and young adults. The rate of suicides and suicide attempts increases from time to time. For
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, suicide is the permanent solution to a temporary problem and most pressing public health issues across the world. Suicides case is
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these days even becoming a
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we are not even flinch anymore. The depression and substances abuse for
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teenagers
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become issues that lead to suicide cases among
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teenagers
. They cannot adapt with that situation and tends to solve it by attempting suicide.
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commit suicide
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they cannot cope with the
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related matter such as depression and substances abuse,
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counseling session, reading and watching films, and
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attention from parents can
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the number of suicide from increasing day by day.
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IELTS essay why do teenagers commit suicide

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
135 words
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