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write a article for who has helped you in the pat at school and now you want to thank him? JK0VE
Whether we are child or adult there is always someone who help you to make decision. when I was in college thinking to choose courses to achieve my goals, there was one of school teacher help me to make decision. Unfortunately, I never have get chance to thank him. luckily, In this article you give me chance to say thank you. His name is Mr john Lewis. Who was very friendly and always keen to help you in every subject. when I completed my study he said whenever you need me in education I will feel delighted to guide you. I wanted to be a teacher since I was in school but when I had to start college, got confused with IT. On that time Mr. Lewis has helped me to listen my mind and to be confident. Then I chosed teacher related subject and now I am a teacher in secondary school. If that time he did not guide me I have no idea what would be happened. Now days after school I do volunteer work in community centre. There I teach women and their children who came from various countries. I feel grateful because now I`m independent and try to to help other whenever they need. In the end, I will say we should have to be thankful who always guide us perhaps we are at school, college and work.
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make
decision.
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when
I was in college thinking to choose courses to achieve my goals, there was one of
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school
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teacher
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help
me to
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make
decision. Unfortunately, I never have
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get
chance to thank him.
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luckily
, In this article you give me chance to say thank you. His name is Mr john Lewis.
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Who
was
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very
friendly and always keen to
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help
you in every subject.
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when
I completed my study he said whenever you need me in education I will feel delighted to guide you. I wanted to be a
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teacher
since I was in
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school
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but
when I had to
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start
college,
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got
confused with IT. On that time Mr. Lewis has
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helped
me to listen my mind and to be confident. Then I
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chosed
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teacher
related subject and
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now
I am a
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in secondary
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days after
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school
I do volunteer work in community
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centre
. There I teach women and their children
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who
came from various countries. I feel grateful
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because
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now
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I`m
independent and try
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to to
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help
other whenever they need. In the
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end
, I will say we should
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have to
be thankful
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who
always guide us perhaps we are at
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school
, college and work.
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IELTS essay write a article for who has helped you in the pat at school and now you want to thank him?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
232 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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