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do young people should leave home when they start working?

do young people should leave home when they start working? rKYGL
Do you prefer leaving home when you start working or living with your parents as long as possible? In this day and age, more and more young people particularly in the Western countries tend to leave their homes and be on their own when they start pursuing their careers. This prevalent phenomenon has become a trend nowadays. Many of them want to leave their homes and they would like to be independent without parents’ control. Thus, from my point of view, I think that young people should leave home when they start working and learn to become independent of their families as they not only can learn some life skills, but they can also organize their own life besides making new friends with different background.
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pursuing their careers. This prevalent phenomenon has become a trend nowadays.
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IELTS essay do young people should leave home when they start working?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
125 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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