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do young people should leave home when they start working?

do young people should leave home when they start working? rKYGL

Do you prefer leaving home when you start working or living with your parents as long as possible? In this day and age, more and more young people particularly in the Western countries tend to leave their homes and be on their own when they start pursuing their careers. This prevalent phenomenon has become a trend nowadays. Many of them want to leave their homes and they would like to be independent without parents’ control. Thus, from my point of view, I think that young people should leave home when they start working and learn to become independent of their families as they not only can learn some life skills, but they can also organize their own life besides making new friends with different background.

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 working or living with your parents as long as possible? In this day and age, more and more young This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
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leave
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 and be on their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 when they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
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 pursuing their careers. This prevalent phenomenon has become a trend nowadays. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
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 they would like to be independent without parents’ control. Thus
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think
 that young This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
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leave
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start
 working and learn to become independent of their families as they not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 can learn This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
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 life This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
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, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
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 they can also
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 background. 