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Would you rather have the university assign a student to share a room or choose by yourself? v.2

Would you rather have the university assign a student to share a room or choose by yourself? v. 2
The university is an academic center the main responsibility, of which is to prepare students for having a both successful professional and personal life. As a matter of fact, university form a fundamental part of a persons' education and make students decide their path. Stemming from this fact, a relevant question that is a moot point is whether university should be responsible for choosing roommate and share a room or students should opt for by themselves. Due to controversial nature of this question there is not a general argument on this issue. I am, however, to a great extent of the conviction that hallmarks of students are closer together and they are able to recognize each other and appreciate the situation especially in dorm better than university. In the ensuing paragraphs some convincing reason will be delineated to collaborate my personal stance. To commence with, when students accept in a high ranked university, they will definitely face different trials and tribulations either on campus or off campus. Indeed, one of the most significant problems of vast majorities of students that go to different cities for continuing their education is habitat. Broadly speaking, one of the heavy burdens on the shoulder of universities is to patronize these students and provide an appropriate place to live. But in some case university is force to share a room between two or more students. Actually, it is better for students to select roommate by their own decision because they are familiar with various personality and conformity. As far as I am concerned, it can be extremely helpful for students if they select for a student with same major due to the fact that a great opportunity will provide to study together. To elucidate more on this issue, students will be able to identify their weaknesses and bend over backwards to overcome obstacles. In this case, students could keep their incentive and reach their pinnacle of their education. Otherwise, dropout rate may increase drastically. As a vivid example, studies have shown that more than 90 percent of students who opt for their roommate have been more successful in their education and gaining a decent job. Another reason that cannot go unnoticed is that students will learn how to make a sound decision and confront difficulties until find a solution in their life. To put it in general word, crowds of students prior to entering university have been dependent on their parents and were not informed of various situation. Indeed, if university allow students to choose their roomy, they contribute greatly to the students' independency. Going into the depth, students will gain valuable information about outanemous life and in this case, they can enhance their self-confidence. However, what was alluded to above can' t be overgeneralized to the contexts. Alongside with the countless merits it has, indisputably, people who work in university are experienced, informed people and are able to predict different situation that may one day come up. In this case, they can share a room better among students than any other could do. In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that students during their education face various difficulties and share a room and select a roommate in dormitory is one of the utmost important issue not only for students but also for university. In fact, students are more able than any other to choose a roommate because of identical similarities and consistency. In addition, they will experience their independent life and learn how to make a right decision in critical circumstances.
The
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university
is an academic center the main responsibility, of which is to prepare
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students
for having a both successful professional and personal
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life
. As a matter of
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fact
,
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university
form a fundamental part of a
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education
and
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make
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students
decide their path. Stemming from this
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fact
, a relevant question
that is
a moot point is whether
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university
should be responsible for choosing
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roommate
and
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share
a
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room
or
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students
should opt for by themselves. Due to controversial nature of this question there is not a general argument on this issue. I am,
however
, to a great extent of the conviction that hallmarks of
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students
are closer
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together and
they are
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able
to recognize each other and appreciate the situation
especially
in dorm better than
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university
. In the ensuing paragraphs
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some
convincing reason will
be delineated
to collaborate my personal stance.

To commence with, when
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students
accept in a high ranked
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university
, they will definitely face
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different
trials and tribulations either on campus or off campus.
Indeed
, one of the most significant problems of vast majorities of
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students
that go to
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different
cities for continuing their
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education
is habitat.
Broadly
speaking, one of the heavy burdens on the shoulder of
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universities
is to patronize these
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students
and provide an appropriate place to
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live
.
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But
in
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some
case
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university
is force to
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share
a
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room
between two or more
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students
. Actually, it is better for
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students
to select
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roommate
by their
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own
decision
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because
they are familiar with various personality and conformity. As far as I
am concerned
, it can be
extremely
helpful for
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students
if they select for a
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student
with same major due to the
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fact
that a great opportunity will provide to study together. To elucidate more on this issue,
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students
will be
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able
to identify their weaknesses and bend over backwards to overcome obstacles.
In this case
,
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students
could
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keep
their incentive and reach their pinnacle of their
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education
.
Otherwise
, dropout rate may increase
drastically
. As a vivid example, studies have shown that more than 90 percent of
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students
who opt for their
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roommate
have been more successful in their
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education
and gaining a decent job.

Another reason that cannot go unnoticed is that
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students
will learn how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a sound decision and confront difficulties until find a solution in their
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life
. To put it
in general
word, crowds of
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students
prior to entering
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university
have been dependent on their parents and were not informed of various situation.
Indeed
, if
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university
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allow
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students
to choose their roomy, they contribute
greatly
to the
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students&
#039;
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independency
. Going into the depth,
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students
will gain valuable information about
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outanemous
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life
and
in this case
, they can enhance their self-confidence.
However
, what
was alluded
to above
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can&
#039; t
be overgeneralized
to the contexts. Alongside with the countless merits it has,
indisputably
,
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people
who work in
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university
are experienced
, informed
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people
and are
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able
to predict
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different
situation that may one day
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come
up.
In this case
, they can
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share
a
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room
better among
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students
than any other could do.

In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
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students
during their
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education
face various difficulties and
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share
a
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room
and select a
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roommate
in dormitory is one of the utmost
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important
issue not
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only
for
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students
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but
also
for
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university
.
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In
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fact
,
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students
are more
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able
than any other to choose a
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roommate
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because
of identical similarities and consistency.
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In
addition, they will experience their independent
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life
and learn how to
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make
a right decision in critical circumstances.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
64Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Would you rather have the university assign a student to share a room or choose by yourself? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
587 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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