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would you prefer to stay in one company or change companies at one point in your career life? What are the advantages and disadvantages for both scenarios? give specific details and examples to support your opinion. v.1

would you prefer to stay in one company or change companies at one point in your career life? What are the advantages and disadvantages for both scenarios? give specific details and examples to support your opinion. v. 1
In the past, people were more inclined towards working in the same organisation for their entire life. Today, different individuals have a varied opinion about the work options. Some people prefer working for the same company all over their life, while others believe in switching their companies. Both viewpoints will be analysed before reaching a reasoned conclusion. On the one hand, there is a group of individuals who dedicate their professional life for one corporation only. The primary reason for following this is the stability which can be achieved only by working at the same place for a longer time. This will not only allow employees to gain thorough knowledge about the application, but also increase the chances of upgrade to higher levels of work. Thus, it is obvious that professional life will be at the advantage in case he is employed in the same industry for a lifetime. On the other hand, there are some individuals who believe that they are benefited by altering companies. This is because such folks can get exposure to different working environments, thereby, allowing them to get trained about the different systems available in the market. This can increase the market value of an individual, resulting in receiving offers with a higher salary, and hence, financial stability can be attained at an earlier stage. In conclusion, this will enable an individual to lead a successful and secure personal life. After analysing both the views, it is apparent that varying jobs should be preferred over other since it can provide better family life. Thus, it is recommended that the public will keep themselves motivated for shifting industries which can help them to enjoy their life and fulfil family requirements.
In the past,
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people
were more inclined towards
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working
in the same
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organisation
for their entire
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life
.
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Today
,
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different
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individuals
have a varied opinion about the work options.
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Some
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people
prefer
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working
for the same
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company
all over their
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life
, while others believe in switching their
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companies
. Both viewpoints will be
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analysed
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before
reaching a reasoned conclusion.

On the one hand, there is a group of
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individuals
who dedicate their professional
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life
for one corporation
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only
. The primary reason for following this is the stability which can
be achieved
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only
by
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working
at the same place for a longer time. This will not
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only
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allow
employees to gain thorough knowledge about the application,
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but
also
increase the chances of upgrade to higher levels of work.
Thus
, it is obvious that professional
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life
will be at the advantage in case he
is employed
in the same industry for a lifetime.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
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individuals
who believe that they
are benefited
by altering
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companies
. This is
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because
such folks can
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get
exposure to
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different
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working
environments, thereby, allowing them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
trained about the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
systems available in the market. This can increase the market value of an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
, resulting in receiving offers with a higher salary, and
hence
, financial stability can
be attained
at an earlier stage.
In conclusion
, this will enable an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
to lead a successful and secure personal life.

After
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analysing
both the views, it is apparent that varying jobs should
be preferred
over other since it can provide better family
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
.
Thus
, it
is recommended
that the public will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
themselves motivated for shifting industries which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them to enjoy their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
and fulfil family requirements.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay would you prefer to stay in one company or change companies at one point in your career life? What are the advantages and disadvantages for both scenarios? give specific details and examples to support your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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