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Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

If I was asked my preferable variant to live in a modern apartment or a traditional house, I would hesitate to answer. In the following paragraphs I will analyze both these options and present my view. It is obvious that to hold a flat in a mew many-storied building, compared to traditional house, is much cheaper. One doesn’t have to spend a lot of money to fully furnish all the rooms in one or more floors in the house. The heating and other facility expenses are the second big matter with a house. One can see this, when getting a monthly bill for facilities. Therefore, preferring a flat to a house will definitely help to save money. On the other hand, living in a traditional house gifts one a private space, free of voices and distractions by neighbors. It is always relaxing to enjoy some gardening, or splashing in a swimming pool in a sunny day, or just sitting in a balcony wheelchair wrapped in a blanket in the mornings with a cup of coffee. Moreover, kids in the multimember families can take joy in games in the garden in the distance of eye-sight of their parents. Thus, a house, even a one-storied, can grand you and your family unforgettable years of stay. To conclude, preferring to live in a modern single or double-room apartment in a building is cheaper and easier to maintain in terms of bills and household tasks, a traditional house tributes more personal space for relaxation and joy. My dream is to earn as much money to afford holding a house and enjoying living there with my family.
If I
was asked
my preferable variant to
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live
in a modern apartment or a
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traditional
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house
, I would hesitate to answer. In the following paragraphs I will analyze both these options and present my view.

It is obvious that to hold a flat in a mew
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many
-storied building, compared to
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traditional
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house
, is much cheaper. One doesn’t
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have to
spend
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a lot of
money to
fully
furnish all the rooms in one or more floors in the
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house
. The heating and other facility expenses are the second
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big
matter with a
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house
. One can
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see
this, when getting a monthly bill for facilities.
Therefore
, preferring a flat to a
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house
will definitely
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help
to save money.

On the other hand
, living in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
gifts one a private space, free of voices and distractions by neighbors. It is always relaxing to enjoy
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
gardening, or splashing in a swimming pool in a sunny day, or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
sitting in a balcony wheelchair wrapped in a blanket in the mornings with a cup of coffee.
Moreover
, kids in the multimember families can take joy in games in the garden in the distance of eye-sight of their parents.
Thus
, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
, even a one-storied, can grand you and your family unforgettable years of stay.

To conclude
, preferring to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in a modern single or double-room apartment in a building is cheaper and easier to maintain in terms of bills and household tasks, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
tributes more personal space for relaxation and joy. My dream is to earn as much money to afford holding a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
and enjoying living there with my family.
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IELTS essay Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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