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Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice. v.1

Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice. v. 1
Whether higher institutions should give equal quota to intending male and female students in all courses is a highly debated issue. This essay will partly agree with this view as it is impractical to have the same number of both genders in some subjects. Admittedly, indeed, having an equal number of male and female in every university course may help to encourage female education, especially in settings where more males are educated than females. This rule encourages more females to attend universities since they are usually the ones that are deprived of education in some parts of the world. For instance, Forbes magazine published in its June 2010 monthly publication that China, which is a country with the world’s lowest statistics of female education, witnessed a massive turnout of females in the universities when equal slots in all subjects were made available. Hence, female enrollment in third-level education can be improved if a similar number of entries are open to both genders. However, while the idea mentioned above may seem laudable, it may be unrealistic to have an equal number of men and women in every course. The reason is that some fields are known to be gender-specific, and some of these students may not be interested in those courses as they may not naturally excel in them. For example, the nursing profession is known to be a female-dominated field, so accepting an equal number of males and females into this course may be unenforceable because naturally, more females will apply to study nursing than males who may consider courses, such as building and engineering more interesting. As this example shows, it may be impractical to have a similar number of genders in all university courses. In conclusion, as attractive as the policy of equal quota for men and women seems, it may be impractical in some gender-related courses. It is hoped that students are allowed entry into higher institutions based on their interests and not their genders.
Whether higher institutions should give
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equal
quota to intending male and
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female
students in all
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courses
is a
highly
debated issue. This essay will partly
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agree
with this view as it is impractical to have the same
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number
of both genders in
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some
subjects.

Admittedly
,
indeed
, having an
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equal
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number
of male and
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female
in every
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university
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course
may
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help
to encourage
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female
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education
,
especially
in settings where more
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males
are educated
than
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females
. This
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rule
encourages more
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females
to attend
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universities
since they are
usually
the ones that
are deprived
of
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education
in
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some
parts of the world.
For instance
, Forbes magazine published in its June 2010 monthly publication that China, which is a country with the world’s lowest statistics of
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female
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education
, witnessed a massive turnout of
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females
in the
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universities
when
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equal
slots in all subjects
were made
available.
Hence
,
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female
enrollment in third-level
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education
can be
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improved
if a similar
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number
of entries are open to both genders.

However
, while the
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idea
mentioned above may seem laudable, it may be unrealistic to have an
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equal
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number
of
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men
and women in every
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course
. The reason is that
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some
fields
are known
to be gender-specific, and
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some
of these students may not
be interested
in those
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courses
as they may not
naturally
excel in them.
For example
, the nursing profession
is known
to be a female-dominated field,
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so
accepting an
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equal
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number
of
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males
and
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females
into this
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course
may be unenforceable
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because
naturally
, more
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females
will apply to study nursing than
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males
who may consider
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courses
, such as building and engineering more interesting. As this example
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shows
, it may be impractical to have a similar
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number
of genders in all
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university
courses.

In conclusion
, as attractive as the policy of
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equal
quota for
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men
and women seems, it may be impractical in
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some
gender-related
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courses
. It
is hoped
that students are
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allowed
entry into higher institutions based on their interests and not their genders.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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