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Would you like to live a long, calm life until 100 years old or would you prefer a shorter life but much more intense. Decide and explain your reasons. v.3

Would you like to live a long, calm life until 100 years old or would you prefer a shorter life but much more intense. Decide and explain your reasons. v. 3
It is argued by a group of the population that being physically strong is a requirement for being good at sports, while the other group feels that being mentally strong is all that matters in order to excel in sports. This essay explores the viewpoint of both the groups and also provides a personal opinion on the topic. Physical strength is the need of the hour for individual sports requiring power. Non-team sports such as Weightlifting, Javelin and Shotput totally rely on a person's core body strength to excel. Olympic records and world records are often held by individuals who have the best physique during the event. For example, Cuban weightlifters are almost always the world record holders as they have chiselled body with great pulling power. By being psychologically sound, a person can make strong, tactful and strategic decisions, which are essential to overcome the opponents in a team sport. Team sports such as Soccer, Cricket require the players to be mentally strong in order to ensure that they do not get overcome by high pressure situations. For example, in 2018 Soccer World cup finals, the French players were well in control of their emotions, thereby ensuring an easy win against their opponent, Italy, to clinch the coveted trophy. To conclude, being physically and emotionally strong is essential for players succeed in their chosen sports. In my personal opinion, I would agree that being mentally strong to give a slight advantage to a player in order to win a clash against a strong opponent.
It
is argued
by a group of the population that being
physically
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strong
is a requirement for being
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good
at
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sports
, while the other group feels that being mentally
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strong
is all that matters in order to excel in
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sports
. This essay explores the viewpoint of both the groups and
also
provides a personal opinion on the topic.

Physical strength is the need of the hour for individual
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sports
requiring power. Non-team
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sports
such as Weightlifting, Javelin and
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Shotput
totally
rely on a person's core body strength to excel. Olympic records and world records are
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often
held by individuals who have the best physique during the
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event
.
For example
, Cuban weightlifters are almost always the world record holders as they have
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chiselled
body with great pulling power.

By being
psychologically
sound, a person can
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make
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strong
, tactful and strategic decisions, which are essential to overcome the opponents in a team
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sport
. Team
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sports
such as Soccer, Cricket require the
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players
to be mentally
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strong
in order to ensure that they do not
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get
overcome by high pressure situations.
For example
, in 2018 Soccer World cup finals, the French
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players
were well in control of their emotions, thereby ensuring an easy win against their opponent, Italy, to clinch the coveted trophy.

To conclude
, being
physically
and
emotionally
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strong
is essential for
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players
succeed in their chosen
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sports
. In my personal opinion, I would
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agree
that being mentally
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strong
to give a slight advantage to a
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player
in order to win a clash against a
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strong
opponent.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Would you like to live a long, calm life until 100 years old or would you prefer a shorter life but much more intense. Decide and explain your reasons. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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