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working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids.

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On the one hand, there is a body of opinion that the parents feel their child will be safer with someone from within the family. In other words, grandparents or relatives are relatives by blood, so they will also love and care for children like their own. For instance, a recent study showed that 62% of mothers prefer to leave their young ones with grandparents and siblings when they are at work. In contrast, a baby sister is a trained child care professionals and may have the skills required to fully nurture a child, but no one can be sure the unexpected will not happen such as childcare centers are not a scammer or they treat kids well.
On the one hand, there is a body of opinion that the parents feel their child will be safer with someone from within the family.
In other words
, grandparents or relatives are relatives by blood,
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so
they will
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
and care for children like their
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own
.
For instance
, a recent study
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showed
that 62% of mothers prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
their young ones with grandparents and siblings when they are at work.
In contrast
, a baby sister is a trained child care professionals and may have the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
required to
fully
nurture a child,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
no one can be sure the unexpected will not happen such as childcare centers are not a
Use a comma before 'or' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
scammer or
they treat kids well.

IELTS essay working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids.

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118 words
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