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Wolrd would be betyer place if women were own leadership. At what extent do you agree or disagree

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Undoubtedly, leadership do not depend on gender. However, it is frequently argued that if females had their own leadership then world would be superior spot to live in. I am in consummate accord with the given notion up to large extent. I will elaborate my views regarding this in the subsequent fragments. To begin with, there are umpteen reasons behind this thought but the predominating one is that mother have more patience level as compared to the men. In other words, in the workplace or at home ladies can deal with any kind of crisis situation owing to higher level of patience however, men may get easily violent. Apart from it, it has been scientifically proved that females prefer to work in a group as they can share their ideas with others members at the workplace. This thing would assist to boost the performance of any company. Furthermore, ladies have higher emotional intelligence as they make decisions by thinking from their heart consequently, this thing would lead to alleviate the discrimination among higher and lower sections of society which is a major concern these days. In addition, female leadership may provide assistance to improve the condition of girls or ladies in society as they would set laws and regulations in favor of girls. As a result, it would lead to decline the crimes related to women such as rape, murder, sexual violation and some others which are major topics of concern these days. On the flip side, there are myriad reasons to substantiate it. First and foremost is that to ameliorate the world's condition knowledge, experience and some other qualities are more crucial rather than gender's preference. For instance, if doctors know how to perform surgery then they can perform it successfully either they are male or female doctor. Hence, this thing is not related to men and women. In compendium, even though running a superior nation, other qualities are paramount but women plays imperative role to make the world better place owing to having ample of traits.
Undoubtedly
, leadership do not depend on gender.
However
, it is
frequently
argued that if
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females
had their
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own
leadership then world would be superior spot to
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live
in. I am in consummate accord with the
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given
notion up to large extent. I will elaborate my views regarding this in the subsequent fragments.

To
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begin
with, there are umpteen reasons behind this
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thought
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but
the predominating one is that mother have more patience level as compared to the
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men
. In
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other
words, in the workplace or at home ladies can deal with any kind of crisis situation owing to higher level of patience
however
,
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men
may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
easily
violent. Apart from it, it has been
scientifically
proved that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
females
prefer to work in a group as they can share their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
with others members at the workplace. This thing would assist to boost the performance of any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

Furthermore
, ladies have higher emotional intelligence as they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
decisions by thinking from their heart
consequently
, this thing would lead to alleviate the discrimination among higher and lower sections of society which is a major concern these days.
In addition
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
female
leadership may provide assistance to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the condition of girls or ladies in society as they would set laws and regulations in favor of girls.
As a result
, it would lead to decline the crimes related to women such as rape, murder, sexual violation and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
others which are major topics of concern these days.

On the flip side, there are myriad reasons to substantiate it.
First
and foremost is that to ameliorate the world's condition knowledge, experience and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
qualities are more crucial
rather
than gender's preference.
For instance
, if doctors know how to perform surgery then they can perform it
successfully
either they are male or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
female
doctor.
Hence
, this thing is not related to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
and women.

In compendium,
even though
running a superior nation,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
qualities are paramount
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
women plays imperative role to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the world better place owing to having ample of traits.
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IELTS essay Wolrd would be betyer place if women were own leadership. At what extent

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  American English
5 paragraphs
338 words
6.0
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