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To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more or their waste? v.1

To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more or their waste? v.1
Several people state that too much of the daily trash from homes are not properly recycled, and therefore, the situation could only be changed with the government intervention by creating a new law to enforce people to do it. Sad as it seems, people are used to only doing things when forced to it. Since childhood, human beings are given the option to do what is right or wrong. However, they make the decisions according to their own benefits which normally leads to follow the last of them. Things change when someone else is watching, and then it becomes a matter of avoiding a factual punishment or to prove we are capable to what someone with a higher hierarchy, in this case, parents or teachers, expect us to do. There are many benefits to going green, but people are too careless and selfish to see them. Todays' hectic life makes people create shortcuts where they should not. For instance, recycling can take some extra time by classifying waste, compressing packages, or even organizing the paper. Hence, humans thing that by not recycling they can earn some extra minutes without worrying about losing nature life or wasting public resources for having someone else to do it for them. To sum up, humanity has too much to lose and a lot to earn by recycling, but our unwilling thoughts, way of life, and even selfish personalities make it impossible for it. Unless of course, we get a specific law that forces to it. In that scenario, just for avoiding an economical fine or some time in jail, we would become recycling experts.
Several
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state that too much of the daily trash from homes are not
properly
recycled, and
therefore
, the situation could
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changed
with the
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government
intervention by creating a new law to enforce
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people
to do it. Sad as it seems,
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people
are
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used
to
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only
doing things when forced to it.

Since childhood, human beings are
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given
the option to do what is right or
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wrong
.
However
, they
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make
the decisions according to their
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own
benefits which
normally
leads to follow the last of them. Things
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change
when someone else is watching, and then it becomes a matter of avoiding a factual punishment or to prove we are capable to what someone with a higher hierarchy,
in this case
, parents or teachers,
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expect
us to do.

There are
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many
benefits to going green,
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but
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people
are too careless and selfish to
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see
them.
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Todays
' hectic life
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makes
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people
create shortcuts where they should not.
For instance
,
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recycling
can take
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some
extra time by classifying waste, compressing packages, or even organizing the paper.
Hence
, humans thing that by not
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recycling
they can earn
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some
extra minutes without worrying about losing nature life or wasting public resources for having someone else to do it for them.

To sum up, humanity has too much to lose and a lot to earn by
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recycling
,
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but
our unwilling thoughts, way of life, and even selfish personalities
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make
it impossible for it. Unless
of course
, we
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get
a specific law that forces to it. In that scenario,
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just
for avoiding an economical fine or
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some
time in jail, we would become
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recycling
experts.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more or their waste? v.1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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