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discuss both views between the beliefs and compare the view that allowing children to make their own decisions about themselves will result in a society with a people who only think of themselves. With the view that it is important to make their own decisions about themselves.

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Daleh Mon 26 Jul 2021 The task is to discuss both views between the beliefs and compare the view that allowing children to make their own decisions about themselves will result in a society with a people who only think of themselves. With the view that it is important to make their own decisions about themselves. I will discuss both views then give my answer. Firstly, It is important for parents to take care of their children and provide them with good things to make sure they stay healthy such as food and clothes. Parents sometimes think that if they make their own choices they would probably provide themselves with bad things such as drugs and alcohol which could affect both the child himself and the society.
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Mon 26 Jul 2021

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between the beliefs and compare the
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that allowing children to
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decisions about themselves will result in a society with a
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of themselves. With the
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that it is
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their
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decisions about themselves.

I will discuss both
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then give my answer.

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for parents to take care of their children and provide them with
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things to
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sure they stay healthy such as food and clothes. Parents
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that if they
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choices they would
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things such as drugs and alcohol which could affect both the child himself and the society.

IELTS essay With the view that it is important to make their own decisions about themselves.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
127 words
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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