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With the rapid advancement of communication technology such as smartphones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantagesoutweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

With the rapid advancement of communication technology such as smartphones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantagesoutweigh the advantages. v. 1
There has been a rising scale of environmental issues because of tourism. This essay will discuss the reasons of pollution. This essay will also tackle on how to lessen the causes. Tourism can also cause the same forms of pollution like any other industry, namely solid waste and littering, noise pollution, and releases of sewage. Waste disposal and improper disposal are a very serious problem in many areas with high concentration of tourist activities and appealing natural attractions wherein tourists leave behind their garbage along their way. Furthermore, noises coming from cars, buses, airplanes, as well as recreational vehicles like jet skis, are a problem in the modern life as it causes annoyance and stress in humans and distress to wildlife. Moreover, the rising number of tourists, more and more infrastructures are being constructed like hotels, which often lead to sewage pollution wherein wastewater pollutes the seas and lakes around these buildings. To aid in eliminating these kinds of pollutions, the tourism industry must take part in spreading awareness and by providing environmental information amongst tourists. With this agenda, this may increase awareness of the value of the nature, so people will be conscious in the activities on how to preserve the environment. Additionally, there should be a regulation measures. For example, there should be a control in the number of tourists per day for visiting a specific place to reduce the number of activities and movements of the tourists. In conclusion, like any other industry, tourism is also causing pollution to the environment like noise, waste and sewage disposal. To help the reduction of these pollutions, the tourism industry must take part to spread environmental awareness to tourists and also, there should be a regulation to control the number of visitors to some tourist attractions to reduce the activities.
There has been a rising scale of environmental issues
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because
of
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tourism
. This essay will discuss the reasons of
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pollution
. This essay will
also
tackle on how to lessen the causes.

Tourism can
also
cause the same forms of
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pollution
like any other
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industry
,
namely
solid waste and littering, noise
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pollution
, and releases of sewage. Waste disposal and improper disposal are a
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very
serious problem in
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many
areas with high concentration of
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tourist
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activities
and appealing natural attractions wherein
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tourists
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leave
behind their garbage along their way.
Furthermore
, noises coming from cars, buses, airplanes,
as well
as recreational vehicles like jet skis, are a problem in the modern life as it causes annoyance and
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stress
in humans and distress to wildlife.
Moreover
, the rising
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number
of
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tourists
, more and more infrastructures are
being constructed
like hotels, which
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often
lead to sewage
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pollution
wherein wastewater pollutes the seas and lakes around these buildings.

To aid in eliminating these kinds of
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pollutions
, the
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tourism
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industry
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must
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take part
in spreading awareness and by providing environmental information amongst
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tourists
. With this agenda, this may increase awareness of the value of the nature,
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so
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people
will be conscious in the
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activities
on how to preserve the environment.
Additionally
, there should be a regulation measures.
For example
, there should be a control in the
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number
of
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tourists
per day for visiting a specific place to
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reduce
the
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number
of
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activities
and movements of the tourists.

In conclusion
, like any other
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industry
,
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tourism
is
also
causing
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pollution
to the environment like noise, waste and sewage disposal. To
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help
the reduction of these
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pollutions
, the
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tourism
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industry
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must
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take part
to spread environmental awareness to
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tourists
and
also
, there should be a regulation to control the
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number
of visitors to
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some
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tourist
attractions to
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reduce
the
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activities
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay With the rapid advancement of communication technology such as smartphones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantagesoutweigh the advantages. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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