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With the increasing popularity of museums and art galleries, whether they should be free of charge or not has drawn much discussion amongst the general public.

With the increasing popularity of museums and art galleries, whether they should be free of charge or not has drawn much discussion amongst the general public. LrLa3
With the increasing popularity of museums and art galleries, whether they should be free of charge or not has drawn much discussion amongst the general public. Personally, I am inclined to the view that the merits of charging for entry outweigh the drawbacks. One of the cogent reasons for charging fees is that the building and the maintenance costs of major museums and art galleries are tremendous. Undoubtedly, by charging a reasonable entry fee, it can help cover the cost incurred as a result of day-to-day activities such as utility bills, maintenance costs, renovation, and staff costs. If these costs were not covered the state of the facilities would deteriorate and be less attractive. An additional benefit of entrance fees is that they allow these places to expand quicker and they can buy in more exhibits to attract more people. The facilities will also be able to hire famous international artefacts and artworks; thereby enabling them to provide variety so that they can attract greater patronage. Consequently, charging an admission fee seems very utilitarian to creating better museums and galleries. However, there are downsides associated with admission fees, one of which is that it may preclude some members of the community from entering the facilities. This is particularly the case if poor members of society are unable to afford to visit these places. It seems a great pity if children and economically disadvantaged people are unable to benefit from the cultural experiences these venues provide. In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that the benefits of an entry fee, in terms of funding maintenance and expansion prevail over the downsides such as limited access for the poor. However, it is recommended that they can provide concessions to disadvantaged members of the community or even hold a monthly free entry day.
With the increasing popularity of museums and art galleries, whether they should be free of charge or not has drawn much discussion amongst the
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general public
.
Personally
, I
am inclined
to the view that the merits of
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charging
for
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entry
outweigh the drawbacks.

One of the cogent reasons for
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charging
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fees
is that the building and the maintenance
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costs
of major museums and art galleries are tremendous.
Undoubtedly
, by
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charging
a reasonable
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entry
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fee
, it can
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help
cover the
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cost
incurred
as a result
of day-to-day activities such as utility bills, maintenance
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costs
, renovation, and staff
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costs
. If these
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costs
were not covered the state of the facilities would deteriorate and be less attractive.

An additional benefit of entrance
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fees
is that they
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allow
these places to expand
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quicker and
they can
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buy
in more exhibits to attract more
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people
. The facilities will
also
be able to hire
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famous
international
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artefacts
and artworks; thereby enabling them to provide variety
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so
that they can attract greater patronage.
Consequently
,
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charging
an admission
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fee
seems
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very
utilitarian to creating better museums and galleries.

However
, there are downsides associated with admission
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fees
, one of which is that it may preclude
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some
members of the community from entering the facilities. This is
particularly
the case if poor members of society are unable to afford to visit these places. It seems a great pity if children and
economically
disadvantaged
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are unable to benefit from the cultural experiences these venues provide.

In conclusion
, I would like to reiterate that the benefits of an
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entry
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fee
, in terms of funding maintenance and expansion prevail over the downsides such as limited access for the poor.
However
, it
is recommended
that they can provide concessions to disadvantaged members of the community or even hold a monthly free
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entry
day.
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IELTS essay With the increasing popularity of museums and art galleries, whether they should be free of charge or not has drawn much discussion amongst the general public.

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