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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility to university difficult. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility to university difficult. v. 1
Admission to a higher institution has been said to be challenging for both the wealthy and penniless students. I completely agree with this statement because being accepted is based on the merits and also, there are limitations to the number of people allowed into the school. Firstly, undergraduate school has a certain standard they uphold. This standard is used to carefully select individuals with higher grades into different facilities. In Nigeria, there are certain examinations for different courses, screening and interviews each student has to pass in order to gain entry. Failure in any form will result in the rejection of any form of application. As a result, only people who meet the requirement are allowed to proceed. Furthermore, tertiary academies limit the quantity of applicants. In other words, universities have finite space with insufficient staff and facilities to allow every student that applies to be permitted. For instance, in University of Toronto, the average number of students who gain admission per year is approximately 300 out of about roughly 600 individuals who applied. Therefore, without this restriction, several people are easily gaining access to any school of there choice. In conclusion, I agree with the view that stated both the affluent and the poor face the same difficulty in accessing higher learning system due to the fact that both must meet academic requirements for admission and many universities have a limit on the number of yearly intakes, which equally affects everyone.
Admission to a higher institution has
been said
to be challenging for both the wealthy and penniless
students
. I completely
agree
with this statement
because
being
accepted
is based
on the merits and
also
, there are limitations to the number of
people
allowed
into the school.

Firstly
, undergraduate school has a certain standard they uphold. This standard is
used
to
carefully
select individuals with higher grades into
different
facilities. In Nigeria, there are certain examinations for
different
courses, screening and interviews each
student
has to
pass in order to gain entry. Failure in any form will result in the rejection of any form of application.
As a result
,
only
people
who
meet
the requirement are
allowed
to proceed.

Furthermore
, tertiary academies limit the quantity of applicants.
In other words
, universities have finite space with insufficient staff and facilities to
allow
every
student
that
applies to
be permitted
.
For instance
, in University of Toronto, the average number of
students
who gain admission per year is approximately 300 out of about roughly 600 individuals who applied.
Therefore
, without this restriction, several
people
are
easily
gaining access to any school of there choice.

In conclusion
, I
agree
with the view that stated both the affluent and the poor face the same difficulty in accessing higher learning system due to the fact that both
must
meet
academic requirements for admission and
many
universities have a limit on the number of yearly intakes, which
equally
affects everyone.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility to university difficult. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
242 words
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