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With the increase in computer use, many people feel that schools do not need to put the emphasis that the used to on basic handwriting skills or mental mathematics skills

With the increase in computer use, many people feel that schools do not need to put the emphasis that the used to on basic handwriting skills or mental mathematics skills 18jM
In recent years, computer use around the world has grown drastically. As a result technological equipment is used increasingly in schools around the world. Many people question therefore whether schools should put much emphasis on teaching students basic handwriting skills and mental mathematics skills. The use of technological equipment in lessons has increased since the onset of the digital age. Nearly all professions around the world involve computer use and even the simplest tasks are carried out via electronic equipment. Hence, it is important for students to learn how to use technology correctly for their future careers. Electronic devices also offer various learning advantages, as notes and assignments can be completed much faster and more neatly using these tools. Nonetheless, the practical skills such as using and holding a pen correctly are likewise vital for future careers. For that reason, students have to be taught at early ages how to carry out simple tasks using basic skills, such as writing. It is also essential that a student develops neat handwriting, as in the case of a technological problem the student will have to write by hand. Furthermore, final exams are typically written by hand and thus the student must develop the basic skill of holding a pen and writing with it. Mathematics skills are no different. People will not always have a device with them to carry out calculations and the ability to do arithmetic in the head is a vital skill for operating in today’s world. In conclusion, I personally believe that schools should keep a balance between using practical skills and using electronic equipment to carry out certain tasks by having student submit assignments created electronically, yet also by having them complete assignments by hand in class and without computers or calculators. This balance is important, as if the focus lies only on one of the two aspects, the student will face problems later on in life.
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a result technological
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equipment
is
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used
increasingly
in schools around the world.
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people
question
therefore
whether schools should put much emphasis on teaching
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students
basic handwriting
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skills
and mental mathematics
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skills
.

The
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use
of technological
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equipment
in lessons has increased since the onset of the digital age.
Nearly
all professions around the world involve computer
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use
and even the simplest tasks
are carried
out via electronic
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equipment
.
Hence
, it is
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important
for
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students
to learn how to
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use
technology
correctly
for their future careers. Electronic devices
also
offer various learning advantages, as notes and assignments can
be completed
much faster and more
neatly
using these tools.

Nonetheless, the practical
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skills
such as using and holding a pen
correctly
are
likewise
vital for future careers. For that reason,
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students
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have to
be taught
at early ages how to carry out simple tasks using basic
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skills
, such as writing. It is
also
essential that a
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student
develops neat handwriting, as in the case of a technological problem the
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student
will
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have to
write by hand.
Furthermore
, final exams are
typically
written by hand and
thus
the
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student
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must
develop the basic
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skill
of holding a pen and writing with it. Mathematics
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skills
are no
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different
.
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People
will not always have a device with them to carry out calculations and the ability to do arithmetic in the head is a vital
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skill
for operating in
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today
’s world.

In conclusion
, I
personally
believe that schools should
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keep
a balance between using practical
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skills
and using electronic
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equipment
to carry out certain tasks by having
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student
submit assignments created
electronically
,
yet
also
by having them complete assignments by hand in
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class
and without computers or calculators. This balance is
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important
, as if the focus lies
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only
on one of the two aspects, the
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student
will face problems later on in life.

IELTS essay With the increase in computer use, many people feel that schools do not need to put the emphasis that the used to on basic handwriting skills or mental mathematics skills

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4 paragraphs
319 words
6.0
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