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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one important for some people. Why might this be the case? Do you think it is positive or a negative situation?

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one important for some people. Why might this be the case? Do you think it is positive or a negative situation? O91j
House rents have become too expensive recently. In few parts of the world people feel that it is better to own a house where the live than renting one. This essay shall examine both positive and negative effects of buying a home and why I feel having own house outweighs the other in a positive way. On the one hand, renting a house in main cities is costly and almost equal to the EMI we pay for the mortgage. It consumes a large part of the salary. Indeed, buying a home and paying loan interest to the bank is better than living on rent. For example, population staying in Melbourne have to spend nearly 1, 500 to 2500 dollars a month on housing which is nearly 35 to 40% of the salary an average person earns. If it persists for years it costs more than what it costs to own house. Hence, it is beneficial to invest money on building a own house than staying at rent. On the other hand, spending money on buying a new home can make you struggle with finances. Nevertheless, one have to adjust and save accordingly as a struggle will last only for a few years, after which financial stability prevails. Furthermore, there will be no need to worry on paying rents in future. Having a own home designed keeps you satisfied and peaceful. According to the latest article in th times newspaper, a family with own house feels less burden and economically happy than others. Therefore, in my opinion owning a house is considered as a positive situation both for stable finance and mental health. To conclude renting a home can cause a unpredictable loss of money over the years. So, buying a house on mortgage and paying off the loan with interest will help you to plan a better carefree life with lesser expenses. Though there may be a few troubles initially they shall pass away with time. Designing the house also relieves stress and improve the mental well being of the individual.
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rents have become too expensive recently. In few parts of the world
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people
feel that it is better to
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own
a
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house
where the
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live
than renting one. This essay shall examine both
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positive
and
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negative
effects of
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buying
a home and why I feel having
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own
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house
outweighs the other in a
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positive
way.

On the one hand, renting a
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house
in main cities is costly and almost equal to the EMI we pay for the mortgage. It consumes a large part of the salary.
Indeed
,
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buying
a home and paying loan interest to the bank is better than living on rent.
For example
, population staying in Melbourne
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have to
spend
nearly
1, 500 to 2500 dollars a month on housing which is
nearly
35 to 40% of the salary an average person earns. If it persists for years it costs more than what it costs to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
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house
.
Hence
, it is beneficial to invest money on building
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a
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own
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house
than staying at rent.

On the other hand
, spending money on
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buying
a new home can
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make
you struggle with finances.
Nevertheless
, one
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have to
adjust and save
accordingly
as a struggle will last
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only
for a few years, after which financial stability prevails.
Furthermore
, there will be no need to worry on paying rents
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in future
. Having
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a
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own
home designed
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keeps
you satisfied and peaceful. According to the latest article in
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th
times newspaper, a family with
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own
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house
feels less burden and
economically
happy than others.
Therefore
, in my opinion owning a
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house
is considered
as a
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positive
situation both for stable finance and mental health.

To conclude
renting a home can cause
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a
unpredictable loss of money over the years.
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So
,
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buying
a
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house
on mortgage and paying off the loan with interest will
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help
you to plan a better carefree life with lesser expenses.
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Though
there may be a few troubles
initially
they shall pass away with time. Designing the
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house
also
relieves
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stress
and
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improve
the mental
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well being
of the individual.

IELTS essay In some countries owning a home rather than renting one important for some people. Why might this be the case? Do you think it is positive or a negative situation?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
6.0
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