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With the development of technology and science, some people believe that there is no great value of artists such as musicians and painters.

With the development of technology and science, some people believe that there is no great value of artists such as musicians and painters. nxxeE
What are the things artists can do but the scientist cannot? Should art be encouraged more? It is argued that the significance of art diminishes as technology and science develop. However, I do not share this view, for art brings a great deal of value to our lives as the most versatile means of human expression, which is also why more and more people should be encouraged to practice it. To start, there is no invention in the world that can substitute art as a facilitator of expression. In fact, most innovations in technology rely on the governing principles of art – creativity, flexibility, and originality – in order to win the minds and hearts of people. Social media platforms are a good case in point; These networking tools allow their users to express themselves through every possible artform, whether it be the simple craft of writing or the shooting of dynamic video rich in details. Further, whereas science and technology are limited by our current understanding of what they are and how much of them we can apply in the real-world context, the only constraint in art is our imagination which is known to be boundless. This should be good enough reason to argue that no amount of scientific innovation can replace art. Given this importance of art, there should be little doubt as to whether it should be encouraged among people. It is not just the creative process involved in art that makes it relevant to our lives, but also hard work that goes into it. Most art projects are known to require one long hours to refine an artwork and make it appealing to the senses, so anyone practicing art would acquire valuable qualities such as patience, diligence, and appreciation in the process. In addition, if students were taught art class from an early age, they would develop a range of skills that might help with other areas of their studies. It has been found that students who take art classes like painting or playing a musical instrument along with their academic subjects are more likely to use creative approaches to science problems than those who do not. In conclusion, despite what other people argue, I would like to reiterate that the importance of art cannot be brought into comparison with technology and science. People should be encouraged to be more artistic as it can teach some desirable qualities as well as skills.
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the scientist cannot? Should
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art
be encouraged
more?

It
is argued
that the significance of
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art
diminishes as
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technology
and
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science
develop.
However
, I do not share this view, for
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art
brings a great deal of value to our
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lives
as the most versatile means of human expression, which is
also
why more and more
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people
should
be encouraged
to practice it. To
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start
, there is no invention in the world that can substitute
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art
as a facilitator of expression. In fact, most innovations in
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technology
rely on the governing principles of
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art
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creativity, flexibility, and originality
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–
in order to win the minds and hearts of
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people
. Social media platforms are a
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good
case in point; These networking tools
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allow
their users to express themselves through every possible
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artform
, whether it be the simple craft of writing or the shooting of dynamic video rich in
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details
.
Further
, whereas
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science
and
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technology
are limited
by our
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current
understanding of what they are and how much of them we can apply in the real-world context, the
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only
constraint in
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to be boundless. This should be
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good
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enough
reason to argue that no amount of scientific innovation can replace art.

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, there should be
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doubt
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it should
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among
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. It is not
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the creative process involved in
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that
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also
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work that goes into it. Most
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projects
are known
to require one long hours to refine an artwork and
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make
it appealing to the senses,
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so
anyone practicing
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art
would acquire valuable qualities such as patience, diligence, and appreciation in the process.
In addition
, if students
were taught
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art
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class
from an early age, they would develop a range of
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skills
that might
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help
with other areas of their studies. It has
been found
that students who take
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art
classes like painting or playing a musical instrument along with their academic subjects are more likely to
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use
creative approaches to
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science
problems than those who do not.

In conclusion
, despite what other
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people
argue, I would like to reiterate that the importance of
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art
cannot
be brought
into comparison with
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technology
and
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science
.
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People
should
be encouraged
to be more artistic as it can teach
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some
desirable qualities
as well
as
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skills
.
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IELTS essay With the development of technology and science, some people believe that there is no great value of artists such as musicians and painters.

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